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The Fly.

Posted by seller2006 , 26 September 2011 · 369 views

Poem Spoken Word Rap Hip Hop Lyricism
This is a spoken word rap i did for class. Im not a rapper but i write lyrics. The rap is about a old man who lost his son and his encounter with a fly. The Rap is based off of the short story by Katherine Mansfield . I hopee you enjoy it.
         Death Fly

My son is dead, he got shot with lead
A lil more than a decade ago, its hard to let go
So  I explain with my flow, the feelings that glow
So bold, the story untold, my feelings that stopped healing
But I can’t stop fearing  my fate, how can I escape at this rate?
All I remember is his death,   distressed all the rest
Called in September of that year, he said he’d be back soon
But we would never hear,  and then it was clear that he would never return
Now all I do is sit here, and be burned, sometimes I feel all I say is rhetorical
This war will be historical,  my life feels disposable
So when I walk around, I see people are bound
Caged, ever had a feeling of rage? Feel like your performin on a stage?
Every moment  of your existence stays meaningless
Part of me basically the start of me, he was the heart of me
When you lose that, you lose you, clueless you

He was forced through conscriptions, they killed his inhibition
The condition of his body, you couldn’t recognise
I remember the better side,  intelligent mind
Kind, never hid behind a lie, read stories by
Aesop, always reached for the top
He placed importance on history, said ”learn from it”
Had a lot of concern with it, studied Aristotle,
Averroes, always to the honest road,
Astonished I stood, his scepticism understood
But no power to do anything, within several hours he was flying
Past the atlantic, I can tell you it was less than fantastic,
He spent three years there, never came back
No more free times, as if he did the crime so he had to die?


Now let me return to what i am currently doing,
Came a across a fly that had some bad luck
Didn’t know what I was thinking, instilling
Spilling, my sorrows on the creature, swimming
Isn’t one if its features, but it got up and survived
I wasn’t feeling remorseful,  and it finally died
I realized that I was the fly, and the only
way I could escape my torture,
Was to give up my fight, succumb to the sorrow
No reason to live, so I await my death.





Still Waters
Sep 26 2011 08:59 PM
I'm not a lover of Rap but I do like what you've written behind the rap format.

It's a very powerful and thought provoking piece. Well done...
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Still Waters, on 26 September 2011 - 09:59 PM, said:

I'm not a lover of Rap but I do like what you've written behind the rap format.

It's a very powerful and thought provoking piece. Well done...
Thank you. I thought the best way to to truly emphasize the feeling was with silence and lyrics that stir emotion. Rap is awesome if you listen to the right rappers xD. Nowadays is garbage though
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Still Waters
Sep 27 2011 07:50 AM

seller2006, on 27 September 2011 - 12:20 AM, said:

Thank you. I thought the best way to to truly emphasize the feeling was with silence and lyrics that stir emotion.
Right, and you did a good job doing that too. Reading it summed up some very vivid memories of my own. I know what it's like when a father loses his only son.
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Still Waters, on 27 September 2011 - 08:50 AM, said:

Right, and you did a good job doing that too. Reading it summed up some very vivid memories of my own. I know what it's like when a father loses his only son.
Thank -you :D. Im sorry to hear that you had to go through that pain. To be honest im only 19 and i didn't know how to go about it. I tried to think what i would feel if i were to lose a son( even tho i barely could relate myself) i still felt these lyrics. I couldn't imagine what you went through.
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Still Waters
Sep 27 2011 07:48 PM
Thank you but my son is still alive 'Thank God'  :)

I didn't mean me, sorry if it sounded that way. I was remembering my dad and my brother who at 23 wasn't much older than you. They are both gone now.

You're a good writer  :yes:
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Aha thats a relief! and happy to hear. Aha no worries :D. Ya i bet eh. My dad told me what his parent's went through when they lost his brother. Traumatic experiances... Thank-you! i will post alot more of my work once i get a chance xD. As are you tho :D i read your poems. They are fantastic. Thats actually the reason i posted my first entry. I thought that your poem really had me feeling much emotion.
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Still Waters
Sep 28 2011 06:12 PM
Thank you very much!  :) I'll look forward to reading more of your work too  :tu:

We also have the 'Writer's and Artist's Hangout' where you can share your writings too if you like. I don't know if you've seen it or not -

http://www.unexplain...hp?showforum=68
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Aha forsure! I had no idea :D but now i do. Thnks. I will be posting on it soon :D
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