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#1    third_eye

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Posted 13 March 2013 - 04:38 AM

the gentle lover evicts sleep,
for dreams, they steal from him her presence,
her breath conjures earthy apple blossoms,
on the sweetest summer wind,

there is a glowing, over the sky,
as if the sun fell into a bottle,
a petal, stranded on a withered rose,
dangling a speckle of hardened red,

so deep
that they see through each others' eyes
so in one
their heart beats each only, for one another

the gently loved, half asleep,
for dream and wakefulness is unveiled,
his heart thunders in her ears,
churns a shuddering sigh of passion,

do not pursue,
from where you know not from,
the world might end, while you are away
do not chase,
what you know not where they go,
you might have left heaven, behind,

the gentleness of tangled fingers,
together, gentle and gently,
received each other ...




~third_eye @SHaYAP©2013


~edit : fiddle diddle ...

Edited by third_eye, 13 March 2013 - 04:43 AM.

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#2    SpiritWriter

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Posted 13 March 2013 - 07:31 AM

I love how the sun falls into a bottle, a speckle of hardened red is also nice. ;)

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Non-ambiguity and non-contradiction are one sided and thus unsuited to express the incomprehensible. -Jung

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Posted 13 March 2013 - 09:49 PM

Well done..... :tu:

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Posted 14 March 2013 - 12:15 AM

Very nice poem :)


Your fiddle diddle edit is funny :D

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Posted 14 March 2013 - 02:02 AM

I love this one. The imagery is very potent.

I don't know why I wander on...
and so I wander on, in hopes
that maybe I'll find out.

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Posted 14 March 2013 - 10:12 AM

View PostSpiritWriter, on 13 March 2013 - 07:31 AM, said:

I love how the sun falls into a bottle, a speckle of hardened red is also nice. ;)

the first line and two that got this one moving .... was walking somewhere for dinner :)

View PostCloudshill, on 13 March 2013 - 09:49 PM, said:

Well done..... :tu:

Thanks be to you too

View PostStill Waters, on 14 March 2013 - 12:15 AM, said:

Very nice poem :)


Your fiddle diddle edit is funny :D

aye .... otherwise I would have fiddled till the diddle did fid

View PostBeastly Decimal, on 14 March 2013 - 02:02 AM, said:

I love this one. The imagery is very potent.

frankly I was a bit worried in the beginning ... but I guess this one is for the ahem ... more mature readers so I guess no worries :lol:


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By third_eye in third_eye's cavern, on 15 March 2013 - 06:49 PM


the gentle lover evicts sleep,
for dreams, they steal from him her presence,
her breath conjures earthy apple blossoms,
on the sweetest summer wind,

there is a glowing, over the sky,
as if the sun fell into a bottle,
a petal,...

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