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#1    BNDGK

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Posted 18 April 2013 - 02:47 AM

I couldn't think of a much better title <_< oh well...


She bites her nails
She chews her lip,
Her eyes well up
But no tears drip.

She tells herself
Don't let it show,
Hold it in.
Don't let it go.

Then just as she knows
She can't hold much more,
They're in the driveway,
Then through the door.

And in her room
She breaths a sigh,
Sits on her bed,
And begins to cry.

She cries for love
And blissful fear,
For though her life
Has been short here,

The weight of the world
Which bends and breaks,
Binds her lungs with every breath she takes.

One pill goes down,
Then two, then four,
'Till she just can't feel the pain anymore.

And although one day
This girl will die,
Just for one moment
This girl will fly.

Yet the tears still flow,
Each one down.
As soon she is silent,
Making no sound.

And with a smile she slips away,
to some unknown place,
As her last, single, bitter tear
Slips silently down her face.


Sorry for the grammatical incorrectness and errors :geek:

Edited by FinnYellow, 18 April 2013 - 02:58 AM.

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

#2    Jessica Christ

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Posted 18 April 2013 - 02:58 AM

I won't fault you for romanticizing suicide but instead celebrate the fact that you are a slave to creativity.


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Posted 18 April 2013 - 03:36 AM

Well done!
Poignant.


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Posted 18 April 2013 - 03:13 PM

It's sad, yet touching. One who writes well will never die....

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Posted 18 April 2013 - 07:35 PM

View PostLeave Britney alone!, on 18 April 2013 - 02:58 AM, said:

I won't fault you for romanticizing suicide but instead celebrate the fact that you are a slave to creativity.

Thank you ^_^ and thanks for reading it!

Edited by FinnYellow, 18 April 2013 - 07:41 PM.

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

#6    BNDGK

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Posted 18 April 2013 - 07:37 PM

View PostQuiteContrary, on 18 April 2013 - 03:36 AM, said:

Well done!
Poignant.

Thank you QC, and thanks for reading it as well.  ^_^

Edited by FinnYellow, 18 April 2013 - 07:41 PM.

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

#7    BNDGK

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Posted 18 April 2013 - 07:43 PM

View PostCloudshill, on 18 April 2013 - 03:13 PM, said:

It's sad, yet touching. One who writes well will never die....

Thanks Cloudshill, very wise and truthful words indeed. Thanks for reading ^_^

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

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Posted 24 April 2013 - 02:21 PM

Very good poem.

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#9    BNDGK

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Posted 24 April 2013 - 07:40 PM

View PostStill Waters, on 24 April 2013 - 02:21 PM, said:

Very good poem.

Thank you very much Still Waters ^_^

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

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Posted 25 April 2013 - 01:49 AM

I love it.
You capture emotion very well, so that the reader can feel it as well.
Bravo! :tu:


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Posted 25 April 2013 - 04:14 PM

View PostAliveInDeath7, on 25 April 2013 - 01:49 AM, said:

I love it.
You capture emotion very well, so that the reader can feel it as well.
Bravo! :tu:

Thanks muchly AliveInDeath7, and thanks for reading ^_^ i'm glad you liked it :)

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”




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