different Posted September 17, 2005 #1 Share Posted September 17, 2005 he gives us the sun to hep our sight he gives us the moon to see at night he gives food for us to eat he gives us fire to to give us heat he gives us an ocean full of fish he gives us stars to make a wish he is god Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pharoah Posted September 17, 2005 #2 Share Posted September 17, 2005 Last line doesn't rhyme too well. How about: He has created people named Maude, For he is, he is God, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nativechick1989 Posted September 17, 2005 #3 Share Posted September 17, 2005 Great poem, different! But I agree with Pharoah, the ending could use a stronger closing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nick_fury Posted September 17, 2005 #4 Share Posted September 17, 2005 Great poem, different! But I agree with Pharoah, the ending could use a stronger closing. 848159[/snapback] How about 'he is the big bang' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
different Posted September 17, 2005 Author #5 Share Posted September 17, 2005 it's really wierd i just laid down and it just came to me and sorry about the spelling, i was in a rush, also thanks for your advice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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