ImaLoner Posted December 7, 2012 #1 Share Posted December 7, 2012 I haven't written poetry in a very long time. I recently wrote some haiku, so I thought I'd give poetry another try.... The pedestal you have built for me is much too tall I fear great heights, you see From that elevation, I will surely fall I am just me Nothing less, nothing more I will never be Some goddess to adore Don't place me above you Heed the words that I have spoken For you will eventually see too I am not extraordinary, I am broken 8 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
orangepeaceful79 Posted December 7, 2012 #2 Share Posted December 7, 2012 I haven't written poetry in a very long time. I recently wrote some haiku, so I thought I'd give poetry another try.... The pedestal you have built for me is much too tall I fear great heights, you see From that elevation, I will surely fall I am just me Nothing less, nothing more I will never be Some goddess to adore Don't place me above you Heed the words that I have spoken For you will eventually see too I am not extraordinary, I am broken I like this. well constructed. feels calm. I don't usually enjoy rhyming poetry, but this is nice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spartan max2 Posted December 7, 2012 #3 Share Posted December 7, 2012 Don't place me above you Heed the words that I have spoken For you will eventually see too I am not extraordinary, I am broken I really like this last part for some reason. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor T Posted December 7, 2012 #4 Share Posted December 7, 2012 I am just me Nothing less, nothing more I will never be Some goddess to adore Don't place me above you Heed the words that I have spoken This part rocks... Nicely done.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cobalt60 Posted December 7, 2012 #5 Share Posted December 7, 2012 thank you, that wasgreat! Apparition, I don't think that could have been said by anyone else. I don't think you've lost your 'voice', simply haven't spoken for a while. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
+OverSword Posted December 7, 2012 #6 Share Posted December 7, 2012 I agree with orangepeaceful, I think it really works because I can sense the honesty of emotion behind it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cobalt60 Posted December 7, 2012 #7 Share Posted December 7, 2012 dang! just like that i forgot the PS i had in mind! sorry... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taun Posted December 7, 2012 #8 Share Posted December 7, 2012 I thought it would have something about getting rid of pigeons... Good poem though... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Still Waters Posted December 9, 2012 #9 Share Posted December 9, 2012 (edited) I like this You should write poetry more often. Edited December 9, 2012 by Still Waters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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