RPM Posted October 2, 2014 #1 Share Posted October 2, 2014 Druid by Ryan M. first there was a god and with that god a goddess both were strong and beautiful they both were truly flawless they chose this little rock this rock turned green and blue and after years of waiting the first few lives, they grew and now they had some forests and birds and trees and snakes why not make something greater and see what thought awakes and so they had a person and not much more than this they told the person, “build this world," and build a state of bliss in the tongue of the trees I am fluent in the inside of it I am fluid in the end of days I am human in the eyes of the people I am a druid after all was said and done the god and goddess left they left the humans all alone to do what they do best I see it in your eyes I see it when you fall when they went and made this they made this for us all I don’t know what to say I don’t know what to do if you’re sleeping, other-world I’d like to talk to you you've got to open up you've got to look inside the wind and fire flow earth and water by your side in the mix of the leaves I am a student in the depth and the dark I am translucent in the time I wait here I am proven in the eyes of the people I am a druid 7 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
j4k3 Posted October 2, 2014 #2 Share Posted October 2, 2014 Props bro. I thought i was good at poetry/rhyming. You blew my poetry out of the water. Very descriptive and creative word use. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lolaivanna Posted October 2, 2014 #3 Share Posted October 2, 2014 wonderful !!! 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RPM Posted October 2, 2014 Author #4 Share Posted October 2, 2014 wonderful !!! Thanks, it means a lot. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lolaivanna Posted October 2, 2014 #5 Share Posted October 2, 2014 Thanks, it means a lot. your welcome !! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scorpiosonic Posted October 2, 2014 #6 Share Posted October 2, 2014 (edited) Good poem RPM, was it made into a song??? (It's a good idea to add, 'Copyright RPM' to your work here.) Edited October 2, 2014 by scorpiosonic 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RPM Posted October 2, 2014 Author #7 Share Posted October 2, 2014 Good poem RPM, was it made into a song??? (It's a good idea to add, 'Copyright RPM' to your work here.) I am working on an album right now and I was considering adding this to it. Though I'm unsure... it's more of an abstract, in-your-face album and I don't know if this song would fit. And there is a notice at the top of this board saying all creations are assumed to be the property of those that posted them. So I think the assumed copyright works well enough. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scorpiosonic Posted October 2, 2014 #8 Share Posted October 2, 2014 (edited) Right on, keep up the good work. Rule #2: Members who post their work to this section are encouraged to include a Copyright notice. Edited October 2, 2014 by scorpiosonic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
j4k3 Posted October 2, 2014 #9 Share Posted October 2, 2014 I am working on an album right now and I was considering adding this to it. Though I'm unsure... it's more of an abstract, in-your-face album and I don't know if this song would fit. And there is a notice at the top of this board saying all creations are assumed to be the property of those that posted them. So I think the assumed copyright works well enough. What genre is this album you're making? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RPM Posted October 2, 2014 Author #10 Share Posted October 2, 2014 What genre is this album you're making? I'm a big fan of hip-hop artists like Aesop Rock, Clipping, Eyedea, Atmosphere, and the like. So it's probably going to be some sort of pseudo hip-hop. I produce all my own music and record vocals when I can. I've been told I'm decent by more than a few people and I know what I need to do to make my lyrics sound good. So I want to experiment with that. But that's not to say all of the music I make will be hip-hop. It could just be this one album. I'm taking influence from Middle Eastern, Egyptian, Indian, and Native American music for the most part. I want to do something different. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
j4k3 Posted October 2, 2014 #11 Share Posted October 2, 2014 I'm a big fan of hip-hop artists like Aesop Rock, Clipping, Eyedea, Atmosphere, and the like. So it's probably going to be some sort of pseudo hip-hop. I produce all my own music and record vocals when I can. I've been told I'm decent by more than a few people and I know what I need to do to make my lyrics sound good. So I want to experiment with that. But that's not to say all of the music I make will be hip-hop. It could just be this one album. I'm taking influence from Middle Eastern, Egyptian, Indian, and Native American music for the most part. I want to do something different. I'm into every genre you can probably think of other than opera for good reasons, lol. Yeah where i live the hip-hop scene is pretty big.. There's only about 50,000 population in the city I live in and there's literally hundreds of local hip-hop artists. ASAP Rocky is one of my top 5 favorites as well. Do you have any songs on YouTube?.. Because by the looks of your poem you style seems very Lyrical and that's what were missing in the hip-hop scene. Too many rappers etc rap about the same stuff. Women, Drugs, and more women and drugs. Kind of getting old Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RPM Posted October 2, 2014 Author #12 Share Posted October 2, 2014 (edited) I'm into every genre you can probably think of other than opera for good reasons, lol. Yeah where i live the hip-hop scene is pretty big.. There's only about 50,000 population in the city I live in and there's literally hundreds of local hip-hop artists. ASAP Rocky is one of my top 5 favorites as well. Do you have any songs on YouTube?.. Because by the looks of your poem you style seems very Lyrical and that's what were missing in the hip-hop scene. Too many rappers etc rap about the same stuff. Women, Drugs, and more women and drugs. Kind of getting old I live in a city full of hiphopheads, too. Between 900k and 1.2 million people here. Also, Aesop Rock and ASAP Rocky are two different people. Here's a good song by Aesop Rock, you might like him: People say that ASAP stole Aesop's name and vice versa. But it doesn't matter. Even though Aesop's been around longer, I doubt ASAP had ever heard of him before they met. I don't have anything posted yet, but I will let you know when I do. If you are looking for lyrical rap, listen to Aesop Rock, Eyedea, Atmosphere, Clipping, Das Racist, Lakutis, and anyone on the Real Rhymesayers label. Edited October 2, 2014 by RPM Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lioness_Heart Posted October 2, 2014 #13 Share Posted October 2, 2014 Cool! Thanks for posting! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Still Waters Posted October 3, 2014 #14 Share Posted October 3, 2014 Very good. I like this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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