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#31    crosswarrior

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 06:39 PM

    I know that was a "little" on the long side. But my honor depended on me killing Adieus, he slew my character; and i'm still not over the grieving period. I'll try and hold off for a little while to compenstate. thumbsup.gif  

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 06:40 PM

at some point I want to write a chapter from the villains perspective,, just for eome variety.  Ive got it worked out who sent adieus after drac.

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 06:42 PM

also... Jade's vampire clan needs a name.  any thoughts?

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 06:51 PM

did it make you feel all manly killing the bady cross  laugh.gif  laugh.gif

Good idea moe - how abt we start that at chapter 4



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Posted 20 December 2003 - 06:58 PM

Gret plan Moe. I myself am curious to know who sent him

(Loads silver bullets into SKS aussault rifle."Shhheeccaock." Cock's weapon. "Ok I'm ready, last I checked I could hit a target at 300 yd." Smiles wickedly.')

(How about the "Hellstorm Faction?")

(And yes Doomie, it did. But I'm still thirsty for the rest of their blood.")

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 07:04 PM

Who sent Adieus? Hmmm... let me think ...

OK I think I have an idea, but it is not fun if I tell you guys now. The point is to let the story writes itself rather than planning it ahead of time. It is more fun that way, as we get some unexpected surpises. Like Drac's death, and it turns out the the vengeance does not take too long. I expected Adieus to be the ultimate enemy.. but... uh well... he's dead tongue.gif


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Posted 20 December 2003 - 07:09 PM

Yeah your right, see who gets to discovery where he came from, it shocked me when moe killed drac, but it's good having a few writing, keeps you guessing alright



Ok guy, 6am, think it's time I went to bed, I've updated the story to moe's ** a moment for the bad guys ** and I will do more later.

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 07:50 PM

an uggh.. an army of riders? Duvessa belongs to a "house" not a militia. I meant "dispatch" as in "send out"
....oi... the riders were to be taken as a few elite assassins.... not an epic battle scene like LOTR.  *pulls hair*  I was willing to see past the cliche "chosen one" motif found in too many fictional stories.  but an army of vampires??? c'mon now. rolleyes.gif
creative differences were bound to happen sooner or later I suppose.  Its cool. Good work guys!   But I think Moe will leave the rest of the story to you. Now have at it and keep on flowing.  grin2.gif
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Posted 20 December 2003 - 07:58 PM

Thank for the contibutions Moe! It was nice having a posting without contant arguing. Just good old fashion Gothic Horror creativity.

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( "Oh yeah. I found a dealer in Botswanie who's got 50 cal. Machine gun and the silver bullets to go with it!!!. I wonder if he can FedEx it to Jade? It might come in handy with those 500,00 dudes." Dials phone. "Hello can I speak To Mummar Gahdafi? Oh thanks. Hey Ghadafi I hear you want to get rid of some weapons of mass destruction? Do you have anything modified with silver?")  

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 08:18 PM

Uhm... well.. now we have an elite army wink2.gif

Anyway, it's still cool Moe. Keep on writing whenever you want
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(scratching his head figuring a way how a girl can handle 500,000 riders)


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Posted 20 December 2003 - 08:34 PM

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1 vs. 500,000. My sentiments exactly penguin.
  Have fun with that one.   laugh.gif  

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 08:40 PM

    Hasta La Vista Vampies. JAAA!!!

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Posted 20 December 2003 - 10:40 PM

Hey,hooked guys,ever publish this and i'll willingly buy it tongue.gif .As for the 500,000 strong riders(damn),you could try and somehow get the beasts/wolves army involved in the battle to make it a 3 way thing,that would cut down the number considerably.Just my suggestions.Keep it up thumbsup.gif  

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Posted 21 December 2003 - 01:28 AM

Hey,im going to post a reply to the story,i PM'd ppsychic but got no reply,sorry if im invading here,i cant contain myself.

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Posted 21 December 2003 - 05:55 AM

Sry, but I think the story was going no where, thought abt broadening it a liitle, giving it more range.

Letting my evil side take over again  laugh.gif



ps with only a few days before xmas, I'd just like to wish you all a merry xmas and a happy and safe new year for you and your familys  grin2.gif

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