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#1    PrettyAndCorrupt

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Posted 25 February 2004 - 06:48 PM

[ disclaimer ] While I find nothing wrong with the following poem, I have posted it on other sites and people have found it offensive. If you are one of these people..let me say beforehand..I dont care.  grin2.gif

Crucify my lover, it was he who set me free.
Hang him from a cross.

He manipulated me.

Place a crown upon his head

To tell him he was my king.

A crown of thorns to scar his head

Three nails you should now bring.

Whip his back and tear his skin.

Watch the tears fall from his eyes.

Watch him die, and watch him cry

Let him fall to his demise.

Crucify my lover

He took my sins away.

It was he who saved my life this time.

And you who left me to decay.

When I was dying he picked me up

No whips, no stones, no lies.

No fear of hell, no shame in me.

No guilt, im fine this time.

So nail his hands and nail them deep

Those hands, they healed my pain.

They took my scars, and chased my fears

And left me whole again.

So nail his feet and nail them good

Those feet they carried me home.

Carried me to a safer place.

Where im not so alone.

Now leave him there to suffer a while.

His death is ever near.

For he committed the gravest crime

He took away my fears.

Crucify my lover

He saved a dying girl

From the troubles of her life

The sadness of the world.

I can never tell you how much you have

My love and my affection


And I can hardly wait

For your resurrection....  

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:::Siva Sarvagatam Prema, Param Satyam Para Siva:::

Sinking, caught up in a whirling motion. Such a strange sensation. The currents uncertain. Like sails of a mill, I spin. Like wheels that move in a circle while you stand on the bank, immune, all evasive..throw me a life line. Save me.
Intimacy and affection, frozen. In this game of chance I forfit. A full hand of love with no counters. Like a moth with no flame to persuade me. Like blood in the rain running thin. While you stand on the inside looking in. Save me, inside looking in. Complete in the circle. Throw me a life line.
Save me.

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Posted 25 February 2004 - 08:26 PM

Although this might be offensive to Christians, I think this is a great poem.  thumbsup.gif  

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Posted 25 February 2004 - 08:34 PM

I am a Christian and I didn't find it offensive at all.  I second Phantom's opinion.
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Posted 25 February 2004 - 08:38 PM

I like it PrettyAndCorrupt.....Well done, great poem

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Posted 25 February 2004 - 08:56 PM

Thanks you guys  thumbsup.gif  
When I wrote the poem..
I meant no offense to Christians. I moreso wanted to relay deep feelings of love and perhaps obsession that one could feel towards Christ, to a lover.
I did write this at a time when I was very obsessed with the person I am with..luckily ive learned a few lessons on life and im over that now happy.gif Its still one of my fav.

:::Siva Sarvagatam Prema, Param Satyam Para Siva:::

Sinking, caught up in a whirling motion. Such a strange sensation. The currents uncertain. Like sails of a mill, I spin. Like wheels that move in a circle while you stand on the bank, immune, all evasive..throw me a life line. Save me.
Intimacy and affection, frozen. In this game of chance I forfit. A full hand of love with no counters. Like a moth with no flame to persuade me. Like blood in the rain running thin. While you stand on the inside looking in. Save me, inside looking in. Complete in the circle. Throw me a life line.
Save me.

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Posted 25 February 2004 - 11:29 PM

Hey Pretty

I do not find that offensive. That really is a good poem, I like it. original.gif

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Posted 26 February 2004 - 06:43 PM

wow, thats a great poem! im crap at making up poems. im alright at making storys. but poems im really bad at.
once again, great poem thumbsup.gif thanks for sharing

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Posted 02 March 2004 - 12:18 AM

Excellent poem PAC  thumbsup.gif  thumbup.gif  clap.gif bounce.gif notworthy.gif

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Posted 20 March 2004 - 10:57 PM

Some very nice themes there.

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Posted 21 March 2004 - 05:42 AM

Excellent poem, very powerful.  well done.  thumbsup.gif  


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Posted 10 April 2004 - 01:38 PM

and here i was under the impression that you were a Hindu......


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Posted 10 April 2004 - 01:46 PM

A complete load of beligerent, self indulgent garbage in my opinion!

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Posted 19 April 2004 - 06:52 PM

as poems go that was truly a poem

well written

well thought out

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Posted 19 April 2004 - 06:58 PM

There is this X-Japan song titled : "CRUCIFY MY LOVE". Are you inspired by it ?





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