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#1 User is offline   pumpkin_head 


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Posted 04 November 2009 - 09:42 AM

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We walk through wooded country
On a crisp and misty dawn.
A doe leaps high across the path
Followed closely by her fawn.

To the field beyond the treeline
In the valley I've never seen.
She holds her course until they're lost
To an endless sea of green.

With islands of wildflowers
And their choirs of honey bees.
Sing of lands with lasting sunshine
Gentle souls can rest with ease.

The warmth of day surrounds us
With an enchanting silver gleam.
We cannot stay forever
I know its just a dream.

By L.J.H. Copyright 2009.

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 10:46 AM

Brilliant pumpkin, you render imagery within the reader's mind with great skill. Well done sir! :tu:
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Posted 04 November 2009 - 10:55 AM

This is just beautiful :yes: ....you are a talented writer pumpkin_head :)
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Posted 04 November 2009 - 11:32 AM

Sighs.... that was perfectly dreamy. Posted Image
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Posted 04 November 2009 - 02:39 PM

Whenever I read your poetry, it's always like I'm experiencing the whole scene myself. Great work.
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Posted 04 November 2009 - 04:36 PM

Exceptionally done Pumkin_Head...it is a very fine piece...
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Posted 05 November 2009 - 03:21 AM

View PostArcana, on 04 November 2009 - 08:46 PM, said:

Brilliant pumpkin, you render imagery within the reader's mind with great skill. Well done sir! Posted Image

Thanks Arcana, that means the world to me.Posted Image

View PostStill Waters, on 04 November 2009 - 08:55 PM, said:

This is just beautiful Posted Image ....you are a talented writer pumpkin_head Posted Image

Aww shucksPosted Image . Thankyou Still Waters.

View PostMistydawn, on 04 November 2009 - 09:32 PM, said:

Sighs.... that was perfectly dreamy. Posted Image

Thanks a bunch Misty, I'm so pleased you like it.Posted Image

View PostHissie Sola, on 05 November 2009 - 12:39 AM, said:

Whenever I read your poetry, it's always like I'm experiencing the whole scene myself. Great work.

Thats what I like the most about reading poetry, even more so, when writing it. Imagination is infinite.
Thanks Hissie.

View PostCloudshill, on 05 November 2009 - 02:36 AM, said:

Exceptionally done Pumkin_Head...it is a very fine piece...

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Posted 05 November 2009 - 09:51 AM

This is wonderful, you really put the reader right there in the poem.
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Posted 06 November 2009 - 07:40 AM

Not being able to stay forever :/
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Posted 06 November 2009 - 01:41 PM

View Postschizoidwoman, on 05 November 2009 - 07:51 PM, said:

This is wonderful, you really put the reader right there in the poem.

Thank you schizoid, it would be such a waste if only I could experience it.Posted Image

View PostRosewin, on 06 November 2009 - 05:40 PM, said:

Not being able to stay forever :/


Thats the cruel nature of dreams, I believe.
They show you your hearts greatest desires, only to rip them away upon awakening.Posted Image

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