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#1    SpiritWriter


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Posted 02 February 2013 - 05:42 AM

To your suppleness
I shall not compare myself
for my sapling root
has barely drunk
from this slightly dampened soil.

Still, I gleefully thrust
tender branches in the radiant sun.

The letter kills but The Spirit gives life. 2 Corinthians 3:6

Non-ambiguity and non-contradiction are one sided and thus unsuited to express the incomprehensible. -Jung

#2    Likely Guy

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Posted 02 February 2013 - 06:08 AM

Defiant and enthusiastic. :)

My crown is like a lilac bush,
With a broken neck, it cranes it's head.

After months under snow,
It arches itself slowly, slowly, slowly
and becomes so much stronger.

Resplendant in the spring,
More determined in the Fall.
Doomed to happily repeat the process.

#3    Jessica Christ

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Posted 03 February 2013 - 07:40 AM

There is a graceful orientalism found in both these pieces.

SpiritWriter, the action (verbs) is quite sparse but when it occurs it is done in a gentle manner which only serves to ironically make your piece more forceful. Well done.

LikelyGuy, a perfect companion piece. Perseverance is the dominant theme and again because it is found in what we consider fragile it gives it a sense of more power but soft power.

#4    Still Waters

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Posted 04 February 2013 - 02:01 PM

I like both poems posted in this thread :)

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