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#1    BNDGK

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Posted 13 February 2013 - 03:30 AM

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Um i'll admit, i'm a little nervous about this one, i'm really not sure what to think of it.

Again (I know you're tired of hearing this but): Remember that I am a servant to my imagination and the poems that i compose may or may not reflect my views, feelings, or actions. Well, here we go...

The paths i've taken
The roads traversed,
The words most spoken
Like lines rehearsed,

Add insult to injury
Turn bad to worse,
Lay down emotion
The words in verse.

The things i meant,
The things i said,
Things only clear
Within my head.

To take it back,
Every last word,
And instead express
The things unheard.

'Twould be a gift
If only to one,
Who's heard what i've said
And knows what i've done.

So many things to tell,
So much to say.
I'm terrified to tell you,
Will you turn away?

If i had the courage
To speak my mind,
To not leave the moment
Unfinished behind;

I'd tell you first
To listen to every word,
Never let one sentence
Go unknown or unheard.

Then like a river,
The words would flow
Expressing my feelings,
In one single blow.

I'd let it all loose
In that moment in time,
Like writing a poem
And creating a rhyme.

And when i am finished
I'd hope that you'd stay,
Hold me and promise
you'd never go away.

Eh, a little romanticized i guess but... oh well. Hope you enjoyed it, please leave any suggestions or thoughts below, i love feedback!

Edited by BNDGK, 13 February 2013 - 03:32 AM.

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

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Posted 13 February 2013 - 02:52 PM

I enjoyed this :)

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Posted 13 February 2013 - 07:58 PM

View PostBNDGK, on 13 February 2013 - 03:30 AM, said:

Eh, a little romanticized i guess but... oh well. Hope you enjoyed it, please leave any suggestions or thoughts below, i love feedback!
I like romanticized, and I enjoyed your poem. Very good :)

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Posted 13 February 2013 - 09:42 PM

View PostArmchair Educated, on 13 February 2013 - 02:52 PM, said:

I enjoyed this :)

Thanks a bunch AE ^_^

Edited by BNDGK, 13 February 2013 - 09:44 PM.

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

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Posted 13 February 2013 - 09:45 PM

View PostStill Waters, on 13 February 2013 - 07:58 PM, said:

I like romanticized, and I enjoyed your poem. Very good :)

Thank you ^_^

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

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Posted 14 February 2013 - 12:57 AM

Wow! This sounded great through my text reader. I like this very much. Well done

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Posted 14 February 2013 - 10:31 PM

View PosttheSOURCE, on 14 February 2013 - 12:57 AM, said:

Wow! This sounded great through my text reader. I like this very much. Well done

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Thank you so much! ^_^

“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”

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Posted 17 February 2013 - 08:43 PM

I think it's awesome BNDGK, love the lyrical rhymes and the flow. :tu:

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Posted 03 March 2013 - 02:25 AM

Thanks Arcana, im not sure how i've missed that comment for almost a month lol apologies for the late reply :)

View PostArcana, on 17 February 2013 - 08:43 PM, said:

I think it's awesome BNDGK, love the lyrical rhymes and the flow. :tu:


“Still round the corner there may wait, A new road or a secret gate,
And though I oft have passed them by,
A day will come at last when I, Shall take the hidden paths that run,
West of the Moon, East of the Sun.”




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