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#1    Mistydawn

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 05:16 PM

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Asteroid skims over Earths atmosphere
Fat human skims teeth over beef-burger
Or possibly it’s a horse-burger

Conglomerates of money-makers gasp at Market Trends

Children play in concrete yards
Ready for home, homework and bed
Dream of play and freedom

Conglomerates of money-makers content at end of day

Traffic builds up over the bridge, along the highway
Gasoline and diesel fumes mingle
“The clouds are interesting to view tonight,“ says Mabel

Conglomerates of money-makers drink long into the night

Hand held out begging an old man with no sight
Young girl runs for all her might
Swallows duck and dive, survive

Conglomerates of money-makers fight to gain more might

Daytime News for all who view
Give weather updates and insight
What you can do with money earned to brighten-up your life

Conglomerates of money-makers say enough’s enough for today

In restful repose men die fearful
Anger frustration and dread linger
The world turns on it’s axle and

Conglomerates of money-makers wake to a new day

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 05:26 PM

that's quite covers the terriable things greed can do to humans .. or that's how i saw it
but great poem none the less and amazing structure !

"why should we not rely on Allah when he guided us our path . we shall certainly bear with patience all the hurt you may cause us. for those who want to put their trust in someone should put their trust in Allah.


#3    Mistydawn

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 07:02 PM

You are an extraordinary verser so I am very honoured you took time to read and comment. Thank you very much. :nw:

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 07:14 PM

I like your profile picture.

"Be peaceful, be courteous, respect everyone; but if someone puts his hand on you, send him to the cemetery."

“To learn who rules over you, simply find out who you are not allowed to criticize.”

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 07:17 PM

View PostSean93, on 15 February 2013 - 07:14 PM, said:

I like your profile picture.

what did you think about my poem?

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 08:21 PM

View PostMistydawn, on 15 February 2013 - 07:17 PM, said:

what did you think about my poem?

Apocalyptic...interadesting.

"Be peaceful, be courteous, respect everyone; but if someone puts his hand on you, send him to the cemetery."

“To learn who rules over you, simply find out who you are not allowed to criticize.”

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 09:18 PM

View PostSean93, on 15 February 2013 - 08:21 PM, said:

Apocalyptic...interadesting.

View PostSean93, on 15 February 2013 - 08:21 PM, said:

Apocalyptic...interadesting.

Thank you Sean.

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 09:54 PM

View PostMistydawn, on 15 February 2013 - 07:02 PM, said:

You are an extraordinary verser so I am very honoured you took time to read and comment. Thank you very much. :nw:
ohh please am just a guy with terriable english some people find it interesting :D

"why should we not rely on Allah when he guided us our path . we shall certainly bear with patience all the hurt you may cause us. for those who want to put their trust in someone should put their trust in Allah.


#9    Mistydawn

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Posted 15 February 2013 - 10:15 PM

View PostKnight Of Shadows, on 15 February 2013 - 09:54 PM, said:

ohh please am just a guy with terriable english some people find it interesting :D

View PostKnight Of Shadows, on 15 February 2013 - 09:54 PM, said:

ohh please am just a guy with terriable english some people find it interesting :D

Terrilble English my posterior! You poems are brilliant, end of.

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Posted 16 February 2013 - 03:03 AM

Good one Misty.


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Posted 16 February 2013 - 05:46 AM

hmmm.... I am swimming in familiar waters ... to drown in the pockets of the rich ... :tu:

He who postpones the hour of living rightly ... is like the rustic who waits for the river to run out ... before he crosses.
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Posted 16 February 2013 - 05:50 PM

third_eye and Source, thank you both so much for reading and for your comments. :-*

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Posted 17 February 2013 - 08:08 PM

Love it Misty, a very different avenue explored with your great creativity and it resonates with me deeply. Thank you for sharing your talent and your heart. :tu:

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Posted 17 February 2013 - 09:24 PM

Very evocative and powerful, MD, brilliant!


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Posted 18 February 2013 - 10:19 PM

This is a good poem. I've read it a few times now and each time it makes me think of the start to a movie. You know where they show different scenes of people going about their daily lives unaware of anything else happening in the world - well that's how it comes across when I'm reading it. I like it, well done Misty :)

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