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#1    Beastly Decimal

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Posted 02 March 2013 - 09:47 AM

Confused Stranger


Dazed
I’m hazily glaring at the twilight
As if it offers new truths I’m too tired to believe
As if, lost within the steadily growing shadow
I’ll find some emotional release
Release from these troubles
Release from this bubble of moral certainties
And self-destructive needs hiding beneath
Bloodied band-aids
Hastily applied to hide un-healing wounds
From unsympathetic blood-friends

I’m afflicted
Nonexistent friends offer me conflicting advice
Too kind to refuse
I let them abuse and misuse my battered compass
I let them corrupt and infest my fragile innocence
Until only a dim shadow can be seen of what once was
The mirror man’s a Stranger
And because of half-forgotten warnings
I avoid him.

"Anything less than a human is a monster," said the first man.
"What about something that's more than a human?" said the second.
"An alien," the first replied. "Anything more than a human is an alien."
"Who decides if something is more or less than a human?" the second asked.
"Why, humans do, of course!"

#2    Jessica Christ

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Posted 02 March 2013 - 03:16 PM

View PostBeastly Decimal, on 02 March 2013 - 09:47 AM, said:

Confused Stranger


Dazed
I’m hazily glaring at the twilight
As if it offers new truths I’m too tired to believe
As if, lost within the steadily growing shadow
I’ll find some emotional release
Release from these troubles
Release from this bubble of moral certainties
And self-destructive needs hiding beneath
Bloodied band-aids
Hastily applied to hide un-healing wounds
From unsympathetic blood-friends

I’m afflicted
Nonexistent friends offer me conflicting advice
Too kind to refuse
I let them abuse and misuse my battered compass
I let them corrupt and infest my fragile innocence
Until only a dim shadow can be seen of what once was
The mirror man’s a Stranger
And because of half-forgotten warnings
I avoid him.

Very good and I could relate even as new themes were introduced.

Am also listening to Dear Whoever's Sound the Trumpet album now so this went rather well with that.

The parts about being too kind to refuse and the mirror man's a stranger were my favorite pauses for it did cause me to pause and think.


#3    third_eye

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Posted 02 March 2013 - 07:15 PM

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I let them abuse and misuse my battered compass


good job :tu:

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#4    Beastly Decimal

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Posted 02 March 2013 - 07:53 PM

Thank you both. Since both of you have written amazing poetry, the fact that you can see value in mine is very flattering.  :)

"Anything less than a human is a monster," said the first man.
"What about something that's more than a human?" said the second.
"An alien," the first replied. "Anything more than a human is an alien."
"Who decides if something is more or less than a human?" the second asked.
"Why, humans do, of course!"

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Posted 02 March 2013 - 09:28 PM

Very good....

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Posted 03 March 2013 - 02:07 PM

Well done again :tu:

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