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First Time Poster - Ode To The One And Only


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#1    TheLogic

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Posted 13 March 2013 - 08:05 PM

Ok, this is my first ever post on the creative section of this forum and I never normally share anything like this with anyone so it is pretty nerve wracking but I hope you enjoy it and take from it what you will.

I've checked out some peoples work on here and I'm nowhere near as good as them but this poem means something to me. It is called: an ode to the one and only.


Ode to the one and only

Her life brings me happiness,
Joy brings her gaze,
Her lips with a tender kiss,
Leaves me smiling for days.

Her hair falls so elegantly,
Like a waterfall down her face,
When I’m in her arms,
I’d rather be in no other place.


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Posted 13 March 2013 - 08:12 PM

first one ... good job :tu:

now show us what you had really done ;)

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' ... life and death carry on as they always have ~ and always will, only the dreamer is gone ~ behind the flow of imagination, beyond any effort to be still
dancing in the ebb and flow of attention, more present than the breath, I find the origins of my illusions, only the dreamer is gone ~ the dream never ends
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Posted 13 March 2013 - 08:13 PM

Thank you lol
What do you mean what I had really done? lol


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Posted 13 March 2013 - 08:18 PM

thats your first. granted ..... you gots more ...... pour it out :D

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' ... life and death carry on as they always have ~ and always will, only the dreamer is gone ~ behind the flow of imagination, beyond any effort to be still
dancing in the ebb and flow of attention, more present than the breath, I find the origins of my illusions, only the dreamer is gone ~ the dream never ends
'

GIFTS WITH NO GIVER - a love affair with truth ~ Poems by Nirmala

third_eye ' s cavern ~ bring own beer


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Posted 13 March 2013 - 08:20 PM

I used to have a whole book full, but that is my first ever ode.
My book got ripped up back when I was in school so all my other work is gone.
Never really had the courage to show people anything I do since I don't believe in my ability to write.
This one was written about my girlfriend who I have been with for quite a while.
She believes in me and is the reason I put this up :)

Edit: Thanks for the nice comment btw lol

Edited by TheLogic, 13 March 2013 - 08:20 PM.


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Posted 13 March 2013 - 08:30 PM

I know a write a bit when I see one :tu:

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' ... life and death carry on as they always have ~ and always will, only the dreamer is gone ~ behind the flow of imagination, beyond any effort to be still
dancing in the ebb and flow of attention, more present than the breath, I find the origins of my illusions, only the dreamer is gone ~ the dream never ends
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third_eye ' s cavern ~ bring own beer


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Posted 13 March 2013 - 08:37 PM

I know a write a bit when I see one? lol
oh i get you now. My friend explained.

Edited by TheLogic, 13 March 2013 - 08:41 PM.


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Posted 13 March 2013 - 09:42 PM

Very nice.....

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Posted 13 March 2013 - 09:42 PM

Thank you :)


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Posted 13 March 2013 - 10:10 PM

Awww ! So sweet. :-)

The letter kills but The Spirit gives life. 2 Corinthians 3:6

Non-ambiguity and non-contradiction are one sided and thus unsuited to express the incomprehensible. -Jung

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Posted 13 March 2013 - 10:21 PM

Thank you :)


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Posted 13 March 2013 - 11:47 PM

It's lovely....she must be very special. You should write more :)

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Posted 14 March 2013 - 12:26 AM

Thank you :)
She is :)
I will try.





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