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GabrielArkAngel

Nov 30 2007, 10:42 PM

Late last night and the night before,
Tommyknockers, Tommyknockers,
knockin' on the door,
Wanna go out cant tell if I can,
'Cause I'm so 'fraid of the Tommyknocker man

One day soon, one day after,
They tried on my sanity with hellacious laughter,
I wanna go to bed, I wanna go to sleep
But I can't ,cause of the damned Tommyknockers creeps

A month to soon, a month to late,
I realize all there tricks were bait,
Its only when they scream that I can't escape,
I gotta run and never slow down,
Gotta keep moving cause the Tommyknockers are around

They followed me to the abandoned mine,
I can see them now, spirits without a shine,
It’s too dark to see, too dark to walk,
I gaze at my entrance, it's been blocked

I climb a shaft and cut my hand on a rock,
In pain, I grabbed a lose wooden block,
I noticed I let go of the wall,
The Tommyknockers win, I lose and I fall,

I awoke in a nice warm bed,
I remember I fell... what the hell, I'm not dead?
I stand up and I turn transparent,
Its dark now and I feel abandonment,
I have become what I used to fear,
I'm a Tommyknocker or so I hear

Late last night and the night before,
Tommyknockers, Tommyknockers knockin' on her door,
Want's to go out don't know if she can,
'Cause she's so 'fraid of ,me, the Tommyknocker man

spiritdust

Dec 1 2007, 09:39 AM

QUOTE (Charlie Donuts @ Nov 30 2007, 10:42 PM)

Late last night and the night before,
Tommyknockers, Tommyknockers,
knockin' on the door,
Wanna go out cant tell if I can,
'Cause I'm so 'fraid of the Tommyknocker man

One day soon, one day after,
They tried on my sanity with hellacious laughter,
I wanna go to bed, I wanna go to sleep
But I can't ,cause of the damned Tommyknockers creeps

A month to soon, a month to late,
I realize all there tricks were bait,
Its only when they scream that I can't escape,
I gotta run and never slow down,
Gotta keep moving cause the Tommyknockers are around

They followed me to the abandoned mine,
I can see them now, spirits without a shine,
It's too dark to see, too dark to walk,
I gaze at my entrance, it's been blocked

I climb a shaft and cut my hand on a rock,
In pain, I grabbed a lose wooden block,
I noticed I let go of the wall,
The Tommyknockers win, I lose and I fall,

I awoke in a nice warm bed,
I remember I fell... what the hell, I'm not dead?
I stand up and I turn transparent,
Its dark now and I feel abandonment,
I have become what I used to fear,
I'm a Tommyknocker or so I hear

Late last night and the night before,
Tommyknockers, Tommyknockers knockin' on her door,
Want's to go out don't know if she can,
'Cause she's so 'fraid of ,me, the Tommyknocker man

FANTASTIC YOUR VERY GOOD I LOVE IT X SPIRIT

xCrimsonx

Dec 7 2007, 11:12 AM

Thats fully wicked bro!

Very poetic and much like a nursery rhyme, a fearing wonder of the story that lies beneath. Tis very good!
You could put your words to an awsome song of which is my favorite.
Messsage in Blood - Pantera.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nNfqP60Mvx0

greychupa

Dec 7 2007, 12:58 PM

It's from Stephen King.... " The Tommyknockers"

The Skeptic Eric Raven

Dec 7 2007, 04:20 PM

QUOTE (greychupa @ Dec 7 2007, 06:58 AM)

It's from Stephen King.... " The Tommyknockers"

Thats what I was thinking too.

Purplos

Dec 7 2007, 05:51 PM

Hmm... I think only part of it is from Stephen King.

But still... as a writer, I seriously frown on copyright infringement. You know... stealing someone elses work and not giving them credit.

The Skeptic Eric Raven

Dec 7 2007, 08:23 PM

QUOTE (Purplos @ Dec 7 2007, 11:51 AM)

Hmm... I think only part of it is from Stephen King.

But still... as a writer, I seriously frown on copyright infringement. You know... stealing someone elses work and not giving them credit.

Yes. It would tick me off.

marcovarius

Dec 11 2007, 05:48 AM

u didnt write that.

marcovarius

Dec 11 2007, 05:49 AM

QUOTE (marcovarius @ Dec 11 2007, 12:48 AM)

u didnt write that.

the first verse anyway.. which discredits me from believing you wrote the rest.. but i still had fun

GabrielArkAngel

Dec 20 2007, 04:08 AM

Hey wait a minute its a childrens rhyme.... WOW!!!!!!! i borrowed the first two lines from a rhyme i myself was told as a child, though it is true i forgot to credit kings work which is "Wanna go out cant tell if I can,
'Cause I'm so 'fraid of the Tommyknocker man" shocking is it not? Do your damn research.

GabrielArkAngel

Dec 20 2007, 05:01 AM

I apologize to taking "Wanna go out dunno if i can cause im so fraid of the tommyknocker man" from stephen kings work
just to prove i wrote the rest here is a second part im just gonna spout off at random. did ya know tommyknokers is a knock off of "the gingerbread man"?

I tracked her down
then i stalked her
her wounds need treatment from a doctor
I laugh and cry and roar with laughter
cause she now plots to kill me the tommyknocker b******

Her life was hard
Her life was long
I made it miserable with my wrongs
the song was macabre
The notes wer long
She lived in fear of the tommyknockers song

She exorcised them all
The Tommyknockers will fall
She tried to kill me with a prayer and a gun
The light is faing and with it the sun
She cant kill me it cannot be done!!!

Have to fight
Theres nowhere to run
She took away all of my devilish fun
I did it all wrong
I am no longer sane
She is gonna end it and with it her pain

She exorcised me there
In the quiet wood
I pulled her hair and stabbed her good
Our wounds were both fatal and would last forever
We went limp and died together

She was brought back to life
Raised from the grave like beautiful dove
Freed from deaths knife
A Tommyknockers glove
She wil remember me but not with love

Atheist God

Dec 20 2007, 05:49 AM

QUOTE (Charlie Donuts @ Nov 30 2007, 04:42 PM)

Late last night and the night before,
Tommyknockers, Tommyknockers,
knockin' on the door,
Wanna go out cant tell if I can,
'Cause I'm so 'fraid of the Tommyknocker man

One day soon, one day after,
They tried on my sanity with hellacious laughter,
I wanna go to bed, I wanna go to sleep
But I can't ,cause of the damned Tommyknockers creeps

A month to soon, a month to late,
I realize all there tricks were bait,
Its only when they scream that I can't escape,
I gotta run and never slow down,
Gotta keep moving cause the Tommyknockers are around

They followed me to the abandoned mine,
I can see them now, spirits without a shine,
It’s too dark to see, too dark to walk,
I gaze at my entrance, it's been blocked

I climb a shaft and cut my hand on a rock,
In pain, I grabbed a lose wooden block,
I noticed I let go of the wall,
The Tommyknockers win, I lose and I fall,

I awoke in a nice warm bed,
I remember I fell... what the hell, I'm not dead?
I stand up and I turn transparent,
Its dark now and I feel abandonment,
I have become what I used to fear,
I'm a Tommyknocker or so I hear

Late last night and the night before,
Tommyknockers, Tommyknockers knockin' on her door,
Want's to go out don't know if she can,
'Cause she's so 'fraid of ,me, the Tommyknocker man

Wow someone is unoriginal.... you suck....

Like seriously I have never seen such a blatant attempt to steal someone else's work on these boards before.

Matt121

Dec 20 2007, 06:06 AM

wow that isn't cool. Did you not think anyone here didn't read stephen King books?

GabrielArkAngel

Dec 21 2007, 04:10 PM

QUOTE (Matt121 @ Dec 19 2007, 11:06 PM)

wow that isn't cool. Did you not think anyone here didn't read stephen King books?

No it isnt, and I'm sure he did. Let it be known that two people are using this account. My name is Gabriel or as you know me Charlie and the writer of this is Max my brother. I wrote "The Light" he wrote this. I did not know he post this without crediting King. My grandmother read him that poem when he was 5 and I guess he heard it recently and that was his inspiration. Also he is in Canada and I am in Australia!!! He tried to get a critique from Spiritdust and succeeded without my knowledge. I am changing the password of this account so he won't ever use this account again.

Sincerely,

Gabriel/Charlie

chaoszerg

Dec 21 2007, 04:28 PM

QUOTE (Charlie Donuts : PredAlien @ Dec 21 2007, 04:10 PM)

No it isnt, and I'm sure he did. Let it be known that two people are using this account. My name is Gabriel or as you know me Charlie and the writer of this is Max my brother. I wrote "The Light" he wrote this. I did not know he post this without crediting King. My grandmother read him that poem when he was 5 and I guess he heard it recently and that was his inspiration. Also he is in Canada and I am in Australia!!! He tried to get a critique from Spiritdust and succeeded without my knowledge. I am changing the password of this account so he won't ever use this account again.

Sincerely,

Gabriel/Charlie

Lol the good old my brother used my account excuse.

You might be telling the truth or not but I like that excuse.

randomhit10

Dec 21 2007, 05:56 PM

that was a great piece of poetry...good job..

randomhit10

Atheist God

Dec 22 2007, 02:45 AM

QUOTE (randomhit10 @ Dec 21 2007, 11:56 AM)

that was a great piece of poetry...good job..

randomhit10

No it wasn't great and don't encourage plagiarism.