Oh hold on, will you? I forgot I left my notepad downstairs. I'm so silly, I thought of making a thread, & forgot the most important thing to it, I'll be back in a second...


Hey there, I'm back. Hope that I didn't keep you waiting too long.

*flicks to page*

Please tell me what you think ? (bearing in mind it's my first attempt at a poem.)

"My head is like a used bullet. Inside, It's filled with dark thoughts.
It lies in between the marching stems of an army of sunflowers,
above who, the sun shines brightly, bright as the once happy memories of life.
But no, this light shines only upon the solid metal shell of my head.
Under my shell, It's as dark & rotten as the fields of war.
This lone bullet is out on the prowl every night.
Longing for the day it finds help, its true love,
hope, happiness & joy."

Thank you

*walks away into your unknown*

It's real good... I like it

its good i like it.. good job , you got any more?

hey thank you so much

ummm i'm not sure if this is considered a poem, i was kind of trying to make it into a song (very nirvana influenced i think)

"Good guy becomes the bad guy,
cause the bad guy want's to be the good guy.
The busy ones, is the lazy one,
cause the lazy one, wants to be innocent.

Over scraps of food, he'll roar.
He'll show me, the meaning
of violence, upon my face.
It's this feeling of rejection,
Which infects me inside.

I'm a stain,
he'll remind me.
I'm a pain,
he'll remind me.
I should be better,
he'll remind me.
I'm not his son,
he'll remind me."

I will be writing more poems however i will most likely post them on this page in the future

thank you x

Nice Poems... My tip would be.... Don't try and make it meaningful... Sometimes if you just roll with it you can fashion something..... Beautiful...

Metal does not rot, it rusts.

Change -

Under my shell, it's as dark and rusted as abandoned fields of war.

very nice