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I tried to read it but tiny writing in fluorescent green on a black background is very hard to read. I couldnt get past page 2 without my eyes hurting.

Maybe you can change the format a bit ?

Thanks for sharing, its interesting so far.

Ok sure. Oh, also if you read t on FoxFire 2.0 it makes it a little easier to read. Sorry for the inconvenience

Does it look better or worse on page one and two?

Thanks.

not bad, however, you need to have quote marks around the statements being made. also, the red text needs to have a different background color as it is almost impossible to read.

The easiest reading on web pages is black text on a white background. The yellow is ok though. to make the story line more interesting, you may want to be a little more descriptive. take the time to go through a thesaurus to find better words for some of your text. over all it is not bad.

One thing to consider- who is your target audience. is your target audience teens? adults? once you decide onn your target audience, you want to write in a way that will hold their interest, as well as use words and phrases they will be able to understand.

The best way to improve is to read books by successful authors who write about similar things you are writting about. look at how they write. their style, the words and descriptions they use, etc.

Not bad. With some filling out and editting, it will be interesting to find out what happens.

Thanks for sharing.
NS