So awesome Azmo
As the stanzas continue, it's like an acceleration of charged power.
It's very strong, and pronounced.
I love the way you write, and can relate.♥

Well done Azmodeus. I like the contrast between falling apart, losing yourself, but it is just foreshadowing since the mold is still in tact, the soul though is not truly broken unless we allow it, no one else can do it, we must break the mold ourselves. Equating others expectations, the mold of our relationship, to superstition is a powerful comparison IMHO. Then you mention that they think you are like clay, which clues us in that they are the molder, and even better reason to shatter the soul, but how sad that they formed it to begin with. It gets more powerful as Owlscrying stated, the stories untold, that to me is the loss of the future, the future that could have been bliss, but now is seen as only doomed, break the mold, break the mold! The end though...the battle of who will reign who first, clearly they cannot handle your reigns, you are in the mold regardless, break it!

The two stanzas, the one that begins with 'How dare you compare to the rest of the world' and 'who are you to tell me I'm wrong' both reminded me of 'How Soon Is Now' by the Smiths especially in the following lyrics:

You shut your mouth
how can you say
I go about things the wrong way
I am human and I need to be loved
just like everybody else does

Wow this is awesome Az, very good indeed. I can really relate to this one. I am looking forward to reading more of your work

Thank you very much everyone for supporting my poetry, and Clovis, you are too awesome! I love your critique because it comes from an impersonal point ov view, like a grander scheme of things. Owl, you're too kind, I only write what I feel... DarkLietenant, you'll have more of an opprotunity to read my works, because I'm going to be posting more poetry on here, just either look for EXOTIC, or BREAKING A MOLD. These two threads I'll post my works in.

Loved it Az!!

Thanks She-ra.

to see what it all means to me anymore
and hold the heart I've never had before
I cry
It's not like I want to be perfect
and it's not like I don't have a regret
but I try
I'm sorry to disapoint
but to my own wounds, I anoint
and die

I hold a sarcasm
as wide as a gaping chasm
within the ground
that holds no point to be found
I may smile outwardly
but inside I'm otherworldly
holding the stars
as life is just a farce
my intentions may deny
what in my heart belies
it's own universe
and the consequence of curse.

we are but specks in something so much bigger
and only a few can be the trigger
of a change far greater than comprehension will allow
while others are only destined to follow
The mind has it's own devices and traps
that nobody within sanity can tap
and in so, the world is desolate and cold
while ever increasing idiocy takes hold
Who am I to see
that anyone can be free
from the chains and shackles that bind
while it's within them that they can find

I wish to release these mundane things
as we are to be "supreme" beings
and though we see, we are blind
to the rise of our own folly, we do find
While it's in our nature
to be ignorant and mature
we find it's our own knees we do soil
and our own plans we do foil
Our world is but a cup
and we drink till it's dried up
to a desert this world shall be
and no soul will be left to turn free

As the dark winds blow within the recesses of my mind
the life I hold is harder to find
though it is in front of me
I feel like it's left behind
so short our lives do seem
in the grand scheme of many things
but it's this insignificance
this little piece of us
that makes us leave the biggest mark
Simply knowing what life has to offer
and the love one can cherish
make everything so much better
Sooo much better

understand this heart breaks
with every hurtful thing you say
with every word your mind makes
a piece of my soul your voice takes
All the risks are at high stakes.

That stanza seriously gripped me,I love your work Azmodeus I really do! Its stanza's like the last one that really get to me though. (In a goodway of course! )
So much emotion! Cookies 4 u! *gives cookies*

I love all your works Az' so keep it up and don't let us down

Thanks Energia, I do appreciate the appreciation of my works. Like I said a while ago, I only post how I feel, which gives the reader the sense of how many emotions I hold are real. Reality I find is more beautiful in verse when beheld by those who can relate to it. *takes cookes and runs off to nom on them with some milk* YAY COOKIES! ^w^

You really excel Azmo
Such profound intensity.
How awesome to set your poems to your music.
Such perfect combo of originality.

Great two poems mate. I like 'To see what it all means anymore' especially. 'Hold(ing) the heart I've never had before' tells me that such a view of how we can be, even if we are that way for a moment, we somehow know we are not going to be allowed to hold on to that proper love, or temporary happiness, or that profound moment. 'But to my own wounds, I anoint' I can relate to personally and for me it means that we can create our own worlds, the feelings we make out to be wounds, our mind telling us we are hurt, we give them power, more than others might give them...and this is again emphasized in the line 'it's own universe'. Though if the other line was changed to 'but to my own words, I anoint' the change from wounds to words would make it every bit as applicable and this is exactly how I read it before re-reading it.

'We are but specks in something so much bigger' again I can feel how we are that true but in the end we will always feel like our world is the world and everything and nothing outside of our own issues count. Though in that moment of poetic inspiration perhaps or maybe just simple reflection we can realize how so small we are. Standing in an open field with the sky above, no horizon in sight, or at the edge of the sea, we can feel how small we are, but also when we stand at the emotion's edge we can also feel this feeling perhaps. 'The mind has its own devices and traps' reminded me of the Smashing Pumpkin lyrics to their song 'Disarmed'.

Well no matter how hard it is I hope you are able to 'release these mundane things' and become that 'supreme being'. It is so hard to realize this truth in life but even harder to accomplish it. I know I am still working on it.

Clovis, how do you do it? you recognize every aspect of my emotions before I can even know where to FATHOM the depths. I guess in a sense, I've been kinda brokenhearted. From words, from actions, from thoughts... It's kind of difficult for me, with the depths of my emotions, to fully understand WHERE I stand in my mind. I like to think about my pilosophy alot, to define, and re-define it, until I can find to flaws in it. but I guess, it's only human to have SOME flaw SOMEWHERE, no? Anyway, I do appreciate the input Clovis.

Now I rearrange this stanza.... strangely it still makes sence...

to see what it all means to me anymore
It's not like I want to be perfect
I'm sorry to disapoint
and hold the heart I've never had before
and it's not like I don't have a regret
but to my own wounds, I anoint
I cry
but I try
and die

O.o anyone else notice that?

with golden strands of light
and silver beams of night
there stands the moon
running after the sun
forever is day
given the might
Where as the stars
have been taken so far

when I hate
I hate with fire passion
blood sates my wrath not
and death does not soothe
for the sake of the happiness you posess
I implore
do not make me hate you.

When I love
I love with fluid emotion
sex sates my body
and trust soothes
For the sake of the heart I posess
I implore
do not break my soul.

When I'm strong
I'm strong with steeley resolve
my bones do hold
my will so bold
for the sake of no injury
I implore
do not stand against me.

When I'm weak
I speak with airy lithe
my whispers do hold
my voice so bold
for the sake of sanity
I implore
do not test my intelligence.

When I'm whole
My spirit shant be broken
my emotions shall flow like water
I'll stand firm like the earth
my passion sparkles like fire
my wiles just as air
I implore
do not challenge a warrior.


This was a song I made up (THIS is one of my songs everything else is a poem [I have music for this, while the others do not] my POEMS are much longer than the songs I write for some reason...)

breathe in, breathe out
breathe in, breathe out
the mental throbbing of a migrane
slowly seeping through the mainframe

let the adrenaline flow
let it course through your body
strengthening the muscles
depleting fears, removing pain

sweep me off my feet
and dance with me to the moon
this night can last forever
but still it ends so soon

you're a goddess to me
so fair of face, elegance and grace
our battles are bloody and long
but the sight of scars and vibration of song

it's tonight we wed
but short lived it will be
tonight I'll be dead
by thyne jealous hands of greed.

Dude...I am like at one with this Lol. Seriously though I totally love it

Thank you very much! (I must admit it was slightly difficult for me to see your comment, but I'm smart and highlighted it lol!

The last three poems were great Azmo. What can I say? Love has its limits. I really liked the last one, you probably did not mean it to be about harming our own selves, but greed can do that, destroy all that we want, by our own greed, a type of romance suicide maybe.

Awe, thanks Rosewin!, it was just a spur of the moment poem that was actually just burning away at the back of my head. I didn't really put much thought into it, it just kinda WAS, you know? Anyway, I have another poem burning away, so I gotta post it before I forget.

After all the times you say you love me
Nothing else seems to matter
Time slips by and floats away
Hope seems to shine through your eyes
Outstanding and outgoing, you make me smile
Nothing can get in our way
Yet everything poses a challenge

Leave behind the excuses of distance
Obtain the lessons of love
Victory is within our reach
Excitement abounds when we're together
Sentimental bonds to past lovers are severed

Mundane and yet spiritual
Articulate, yet plain
Tepmtuous and subtle
Tantilizing yet reserved
Harmonious loving bonds are sewn
Eternally till death do us part
Without hesitation I say:

Anthony loves Matthew

(yes, this is my love life summed up, if you don't like the fact I'm gay, then shove it.)[on a side note, this WAS all right off the tip of my fingers. LOL]

Beautiful work, I couldn't begin to explain in words as supurb as yours the emotions that you have described. Bravo.

Well, thank you muchly, Maggie! I do appreciate it.

Hark! A Sonata!

The whisper of joyful promise
Carving the path for a canyon
Filling this valley with thought
Only emptying the contents in God

This collective soul filling to empty
And emptying to become full
Humanity is just the hull of God
Of which is the vessel to pull

Reflecting the sun to shine out the moon
And polish the stars to blind out the world
We are all just dust, rust, and carbon
And we are all part of God.

Selfish perceptions of an unstable mind
Gives solace to the words that aren't kind
One may even believe we come to find
That those who are blind can see, while the rest of us are blind

Heavens sandy dust we rise
And infernal rains to us we fall
Eternal trust does suprise
Infinite lust our only call

Hark I hear a sonata of BALANCE!

through chaos we come to find that not everything is chaotic
through love, we find there is even more hate
through sorrow, we can only achieve true joy
For every smile, there is a frown
for every pair of pants, there is a gown
and for birds, are fish
for snakes the mice
I shall find this blank slate, and wipe it clean
only to make chaos serene
and with serene chaos the world will vanish
only to reappear , with a fate more clear!

My stomach is:
Undulating
Pulsating
Exciting...
True
There will be many a:
Conglamorating
Scintillating
Seperating
Brew
This honor is:
Tremendous
Stupendous
Righteous...
Few
This experience is:
Outrageous
Courageous
Temptatious...
New

I'm excited to announce I will be moving to New York Here in a couple days! I'll be living in Corning, in the middle of Wine Country, and The property I have already has a Vineyard! OMG WINE!!!

fading stars upon the pale face of the moon
and love is the promise of things to come soon
the sun beams with pride for the autumn
reflected by the leaves of gold to come
it's sweet this hope for joy which abounds
and prosperous this relationship all around

it's sad to have what so many may lack
and to hold my own to take up lover's slack
what's mine is ours for the taking I guess
it's so hard to not tell if you're faking I digress
to listen to our hearts beat as one my love
you are the essence of my hearts cooing dove.

You just keep on going don't ya! Very impressive, awesome work, I love it