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revolver ocelot
ok a holy war was fought years ago,between a gang called the Angels and blackwing,because blackwing were after the Angel Legacy(emperor Shiva died and all the angels were to inherit it,but blackwing wanted it so they could build a nuclear weapon and to avenge their dead master Dragon)the angels are wiped out but no one knows where the inheritence went and they search for it to this day....

blackwing-2 allied forces(team wing and the black hand)

The angels-a rich holy race,wanted world peace.

Dragon- ex black- hand leader

team wing-a gang named after birds(vulture,raven,hawk,eagle)leader:Raven,right hand man Colonel Fury

the black hand gang-a gang of legendary villians(destiny,ox,rat,goat,dragon,monkey,snake,named after chinese zodiacs)leader:destiny and right hand man Magum Tiger
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i couldn't fit it all on one page
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RAVEN:team wing leader,24 years old,master of hand to hand combat,also called Boss,uses a special gun called The Master,it shoots electrical bullets,ravens seem to flock around her.nationality english.

Vulture:throws bones at enemies and eats decomposing bodies,over 3000 years old,keeps alive by drinking special potions and water.russian.

hawk:shoots a crossbow and is very agile and fast,leaps long distances and is obsessed with pain and suffering.german
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Eagle:grows claws on his hands and feet, can take short flight and uses daggers and sometimes a pistol as weapons.
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Magnum Tiger: so called because he loves to use magnums as weapons and has some scars like stripes on his face,at only 19 years old he is young but still cocky.is attracted to Raven.
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Destiny: called that because she is seeking her destiny,is in fact a liar,she killed her father Dragon,after Raven told her to,which made her the black hand leader,doesn't realise that Raven is her sister.she still wonders what her fate is.nationality african/american.age 35.
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rat: black hand member,very small ,has a tail and his nationality is uknown.

snake: has skin coloured like a coral snake,throws poisonous darts and his tounge is shaped like a snakes'.mexican

goat: has goat horns on his head,rams to attack and sometimes uses a revolver gun.american

dragon: legendary ex black hand leader,was killed by destiny and is raven and destiny's father,was a sniper like destiny,never missed a target.taught destiny everything about sniping.american

monkey:hangs around forest environments,swings around trees and uses a spear as a weapon.english

colonel fury: raven's right hand man,shoots fire from his hands and is always angry,doesn't really trust Raven.russian






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scene ideas-
Shivel
Good god man, just put it all in one post. blink.gif
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skye:angel ancestor works for the WHITE WING TEAM(a group set up by the goverment to spy on and keep the angel legacy from the BLACK WING TEAM)
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SCENE IDEA:

RAVEN:ADMIT IT!YOU KNOW WHERE THE ANGEL LEGACY IS!

DRAGON:NO I!-AHHHH(RAVEN KICKS HIM)

DESTINY:HE DOESN'T KNOW WHAT YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT!

RAVEN:GRRRR!!!(PUNCHES DRAGON THEN KICKS HIM)LAST CHANCE!!

DESTINY: HOW CAN YOU DO THIS TO HIM?

RAVEN: HAVE IT YOUR WAY( GETS OUT THE MASTER)THERE ARE 3 BULLETS IN THIS GUN,I WILL PULL THE TRIGGER 3 TIMES,OK HERE WE GO)

FIRST TIME-CLICK,SECOND TIME-CLICK...

DESTINY:STOP!(PUTS HAND ON GUN)

RAVEN:WHAT IS IT?

DESTINY:HE'S SUFFERED ENOUGH.

RAVEN:I AM DOING YOU A FAVOUR,IF YOU KILL HIM YOU WILL BE COME THE BLACK HAND LEADER...

DRAGON:WELL SHE-AHHHH(RAVEN SHOOTS HIS KNEES HE FALLS DOWN)

DESTINY:YOU MONSTER!

RAVEN:I AM GOING,THE REST IS UP TO YOU.(EXITS)

DESTINY:FATHER!HURRY I WILL GET YOU BACK TO THE TOWER.....
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ANOTHER SCENE-

(ON A MOUNTAINTOP)

DESTINY:KILL YOU!??

DRAGON:SHOOT ME...

DESTINY:I-I CAN'T

DRAGON:DESTINY PLEASE KILL ME...

DESTINY:(CRYING)(AIMS GUN AT HEART)

DRAGON:DON'T BE SAD...WE'LL MEET AGAIN SOMEDAY(IS SHOOT IN HEART,CRIES BLOOD AND FALLS TO THE GROUND DEAD)
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THAT IS IT SO FAR
BurnSide
revolver, do NOT continuously post. Post it all at once, and if you have to add more, use the edit button and add additional work into your existing post.

Multi-posting is very ill-advised. I also remember advising you not to post in all caps. Once again, DON'T do it.

This topic has become nothing but spam due to your constant posting, so i'm closing it.
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