sheila12
Jul 1 2005, 02:31 AM
Where Do I belong?
Do I truly have friends
Will I ever be accepted
Does anyone truly care
Why do I feel this way
Where do I belong?
kikuchiyo
Jul 1 2005, 02:44 AM
It's nice and short. I'm no poetry expert but the rythm is a little off. For the "Does anyone truly care about me" i would cut the "about me" it will give it a better "beat". Although it is self expression and the only true judge here is you.
sheila12
Jul 1 2005, 02:46 AM
thanks for the tip.
Mr Ed
Jul 1 2005, 06:58 PM
It gives people a very, very good idea of what you are like. I suppose that is its aim.
Probably better than some of the stuff I could write, I am not so great at poetry, writing fiction comes easier to me.
I love it. It is cute.
I care about you.
sheila12
Jul 7 2005, 01:03 AM
thanks for liking everyone.
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