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Conquest
Chapter I: Only The Beginning

As I walked slowly through the hallways of the house I grabbed the flashlight, batteries, and matches from the desk, stuffed them into my backpack and opened the oak-wood desk and removed my revolver from it. I placed it into my pocket. I walked down the hallways of my house to the basement. I looked around for an insignia on the floor. When I found it I reached for the shovel and dug up the area where the insignia was and found a bronze hatch. I opened the hatch that showed a newly placed ladder.
I guess it’s time, I thought to myself as I began to climb down the ladder. I moved quickly and closed the hatch behind me. When I got to the bottom there was a door with a combination lock that I placed there a while back. The door was made of lead and was about two meters thick; it was used to keep us safe for the time required for the radiation to drop.
I began to input the combination, a strange one at that, but nonetheless, a combination. Slowly turned the knob so I won’t miss a single number. The number repeated in my head six, six, and six. They played in my head so I would never forget.
The hatch opened suddenly above and feet climbed down the ladder. I rushed to open the door as the sound began to come closer and closer. The door clicked and opened and saw another lead door was in front of me. I rushed into the door and it began to shut slowly as the sound of people coming down the ladder grew and as people hit the dirt with their feet. I saw his face and badge on his chest. He sprinted to the closing door but it shut before he got to it. There was banging on the door and more people came down the ladder.
“This is the FBI,” he yelled,” Open the door now! Or we will blow it open.”
I ignored him and began to work on the door inputting the combination seven, seven, and seven. The door open and I could here the sound of C4 being set on the door behind me. The door slid open and I ran through and shut the door as the C4 counted down.
“FIRE IN THE HOLE!” someone warned and people began to climb up the ladder.
It was quiet for a moment all I could here was C4 counting down until I heard the alarm going off for the signal that the launch was activated. I ran into the other room and was ready to hear the statement from my other comrades in other countries around the world. I began to get text messages on my cell, all confirming the nuclear weapons launching. I walked to my chair and the C4 on the door stopped, yet I heard no one coming down the ladder and no one yelling. Instead the doors opened and Sami walked through the door and shut it behind him.
I looked at him seeing blood on his face and his M16 gripped tightly in his hands. He reloaded his cartridge and wiped the blood off his face and removed the gas mask that revealed his black eyes and his lack of hair.
“What happened to the FBI, Sami?” I asked.
“Took care of them,” he said and sat his muscular body on a chair in front of him.
I knew Sami since sixth grade and he wasn’t always this muscular. He use to be kind of obese, but very fast and a good friend. I knew a lot about him, he was born in Britain after his parents moved from Africa for one and then moved to the U.S. Yet I never thought he would resort to killing, but this was a cause that must have been carried out for the good of this world.
“I remember when we use to talk about doing this in school, but I never thought we were actually going to pull this off,” I told him.
“I know, I didn’t think we could even get the money to do such a thing. Well, it’s time to put this plan into action. How many nukes were launched, Geoffrey?”
“About forty of them, two already hit and the rest are coming down on the other countries.”
“Err, are we really doing the right thing here?”
“I really don’t know any more, but I always believed that there will be one more war to end all wars and give us peace.”
“No doubt.”
“We might need those radiation suit over there. This is going to be a long winter for all of us,”
“When can we go up?” he asked me as I looked at the television in the corner of the room.
“About two weeks or so.”
“The FBI is in complete pandemonium as they try to figure out where all these nuclear missiles are coming from. They know where the leader of this Terrorist attack is but they were incapable of bringing him in. Local authorities said that they sent in men to apprehend this man, but was unsuccessful and all forty men were brought down by this man.”
Our faces were on the television and next to it had our names, height, age, and even where we went to work at. It was on there for what seemed like a millennium and was removed from the television as slowly as possible.
“We have here Arthur Jones friends of these two men,” the reporter said.
“Well they always use to talk about doing this, but I never thought they were. They asked me to join them multiple times but I refused believing that it was just a hoax, “ he told the reporter.
“We have news on the ongoing missile strikes. Oh my god, there is one heading this way! We need to go… now!” She panicked.
They ran as the camera was facing the floor and I heard a loud noise, then the television went out, and all was dark. My cell phone suddenly died out and everything went quiet. I heard nothing nor saw anything.
“Is it over?” Sami asked me.
“No it is only the beginning,”

Ooh, I can't wait for the next part, it sounds pretty cool.

It's mysterious.. very nice

Not bad. It seems a little rushed though, even when hes running from the F.B.I it doesnt need to go along so quickly. Theres nothing wrong with giving us more descriptions and details which if added here could make it a more polished introduction. Otherwise its pretty good.

Tis just my two cents!

Alright more detail and less rushing alrigt thanx. I will repost my first chapter after I fix it...

Wow, cant believe i havent reposted yet... hmm, need to get on this site more often, well i added to the first chapter a bit a little extension and i am editing and adding to the second one.



Chapter I: Only the Beginning

As I walked slowly through the hallways of the house I grabbed the flashlight, batteries, and matches from the desk, stuffed them into my backpack and opened the oak-wood desk and removed my prized “Colt .44 S&W Revolver” from the second drawer down where I kept my business papers. I looked at the walls of my house taking in every detail, the pictures of my family, the white walls, and the bug that I splattered against the wall was still there for over a week because I hadn’t cleaned it up yet. I walked into the kitchen and opened my fridge, looking at the food from last nights feast and three week old lasagna that I made on movie night. I got up and looked at the sink looking at the week’s worth of dirty dishes, cups, and silver ware. I walked up to the sink and turned on the water and began to do the dishes. I didn’t know why I was doing the dishes, but I was and I planned to make them shine like they never have before. After looking at the last dish and removed every stain off of every dish, glass, cup, silverware, and knives, I placed them into the dishwasher with the rest of them. I placed detergent into the dishwasher and you could here a small beep from behind the dishwasher, under the floor, and in the wall to the next to the front door. From there I got up and walked down the hallways of my house and into my basement. I looked around for an insignia on the floor. When I found it I reached for the shovel and dug up the area where the insignia was and found a bronze hatch. I opened the hatch that showed a newly placed ladder.
I guess it’s time, I thought to myself as I began to climb down the ladder. I moved quickly and closed the hatch behind me. Each time I had moved my feet down the ladder a thump came at the door and my mind knew that this was it, but I didn’t wanted it to happen this way. When I got to the bottom there was a door with a combination lock that I placed there a while back. The door was made of lead and was about two meters thick; it was used to keep us safe for the time required for the radiation to drop.
I began to input the combination, a strange one at that, but nonetheless, a combination. I slowly turned the knob so I wouldn’t miss a single number. The number repeated in my head six, six, and six. They played in my head so I would never forget.
The hatch opened suddenly above and feet climbed down the ladder. I rushed to open the door as the sound began to come closer and closer. The door clicked and opened and saw another lead door was in front of me. I rushed into the door and it began to shut slowly as the sound of people coming down the ladder grew and as people hit the dirt with their feet. I saw the letters “FBI” on the back of his jacket just before he turned around on his chest. He sprinted to the closing door but it shut before he got to it. There was banging on the door and more people came down the ladder.
“This is the FBI,” he yelled,” Open the door now! Or we will blow it open.”
I ignored him and began to work on the door inputting the combination seven, seven, and seven. The door open and I could here the sound of C4 being set on the door behind me. The door slid open and I ran through and shut the door as the C4 counted down.
“FIRE IN THE HOLE!” someone warned and people began to climb up the ladder.
It was quiet for a moment all I could here was C4 counting down until I heard the alarm going off for the signal that the launch was activated. I ran into the other room and was ready to hear the statement from my other comrades in other countries around the world. I began to get text messages on my cell, all confirming the nuclear weapons launching. I walked to my chair and the C4 on the door stopped, yet I heard no one coming down the ladder and no one yelling. Instead the doors opened and Sami walked through the door and shut it behind him.
I looked at him seeing blood on his face and his M16 gripped tightly in his hands. He reloaded his cartridge and wiped the blood off his face and removed the gas mask that revealed his black eyes and his lack of hair.
“What happened to the FBI, Sami?” I asked.
“Took care of them,” he said and sat his muscular body on a chair in front of him.
I knew Sami since sixth grade and he wasn’t always this muscular. He use to be kind of obese, but very fast and a good friend. I knew a lot about him; he was born in Britain after his parents moved from Africa for one and then moved to the U.S. He was always a holy man, believed in the power of God, and the path of righteousness. Yet I never thought he would resort to killing, but this was a cause that must have been carried out for the good of this world.
“I remember when we use to talk about doing this in school, but I never thought we were actually going to pull this off,” I told him.
“I know, I didn’t think we could even get the money to do such a thing. Well, it’s time to put this plan into action. Geoff how many nukes were launched?”
“About forty of them, two already hit and the rest are coming down on the other countries.”
“Err, are we really doing the right thing here?”
“I really don’t know any more, but I always believed that there will be one more war to end all wars and give us peace.”
“No doubt.”
“We might need those radiation suits over there. This is going to be a long winter for all of us,”
“When can we go up?” he asked me as I looked at the television in the corner of the room.
“About two weeks or so.”
“The FBI is in complete pandemonium as they try to figure out where all these nuclear missiles originated from. They know where the leader of this Terrorist attack is but they were incapable of bringing him in. Local authorities said that they sent in men to apprehend this man, but was unsuccessful and all forty men were brought down by this man.”
Our faces were on the television and next to it had our names, height, age, and even where we went to work at. It was on there for what seemed like a millennium and was removed from the television as slowly as possible.
“We have here Arthur Jones friends of these two men,” the reporter said.
“HA! Friend, how ‘bout traitor! Bastard…” I yelled out.
“I have known them both since the sixth grade, always talking about how they were going to rule the world, having followers that believed in their cause. They asked me to join them multiple times but I refused believing that it was just a hoax,” he told the reporter.
“Police are now sending in reinforcements to apprehend the perpetrators in the house. Oh my… We have just gotten reports that all of the police that were sent in earlier have been annihilated! Body count is twenty and rising! I don’t know how you people at home are feeling, but this is completely insane.”
“We have news on the ongoing missile strikes. Oh my god, there is one heading this way! We need to go… now!” She panicked.
They ran as the camera was facing the floor as they panicked, I heard a loud noise, then the television went out, and all was dark. My cell phone suddenly died out and everything went quiet. I heard nothing nor saw anything.
“Is it over?” Sami asked me.
“No it is only the beginning,”