Hi. My name is, Tad. I'm a skateboarder, and when I'm older, I want to get into filmmaking. But this idea for a movie made me feel like I should actually write it down, in an essay- sorta- form. It's titled 360, and this is the summary to it:


I had a really bad idea here, but here are two horros I'm making:

The first one has no title, so far. It's about two friends, and the main character's little brother. Jack is the main character, and Ray is his friend. Lately, the water of his town has gone murky and black, and Jack's little brother is complaining about ghosts in the bathroom. Plumbers have gone missing, and people are being slaughtered while taking showers. And, eventually, Ray has gone missing, with no evidence who has taken him, except for an owerflow of black water coming from his toilet.... Now Jack, with the help of Jeff the Plumber, has to figure out what is contaminating his town's plumbing, before everyone he knows is swallowed into mystery.

Book 2

MY BACKYARD

The old house on Fern's road is supposivley haunted. (Every time someone moves in there every year) they die, and get buried in the backyard. Seth has moved in there, and this kid, Jordan, at school, keeps reminding him to get out, or else he'll die. But Seth knows better, and he knows it's just an Urban Legend. But when he sees his baseball bat get sucked into the ground, he's a bit convinced. All of a sudden, huge weeds start wrapping around his house, his toilet's and pipes are clogged with vines. The only thing in his yard that hasn't been sucked into the ground is his tramploine. But when his little brother get's sucked into the ground, he has to go after him, before his yard tries to sink under the whole house.


What'dyou think? alot better than my last one!

If I may be brutally honest...first off the names are horrid. The story is cliche...it sounds like the plot line of an early 1990s video game.

Get rid of the High School cliques and the names. The story isn't realistic...high school cliques don't get into huge battles...highschool gangs do.

It seems like you want to do a Lords of Dogtown meets Fast and the Furious 3 type of thing here.

You kind of have to do a skateboarding story in movie form...nobody wants to read about someone doing a trick they want to see it. But then again if your to do it as a movie you probably don't have the resources and such to actually make it.

I apologize if I have offended you.

As a book or movie, I wouldn't read or watch this.
But, if it was a videogame, it seems crazy enough so that I'd definitely wanna play it.

Good luck in sorting out your ideas and such!

No offence but are you serious? Well i agree with what cadetak47 said about the story, names etc.
My humble opinion is that you obviously have a good imagination but you should sit down and think about it, take your time and try not to complicate it and try to keep it realistic so people can identify with the characters.
Good luck anyway!