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Inner Space

Jul 9 2007, 04:42 PM

Magic In The Moment

I often envision that first kiss with you
All senses run wild, my imagination does too
My heart starts to race, my face becomes flush
I find myself breathless, I feel a head Rush

Touching my face, you wipe away a tear
Slowly we draw closer with the tenderest of care
I gaze into your eyes, such passion I see
Our lips begin to meet, I'm suddenly set free

My god....I say under my breath
Such life within me now, forgotten is death
My temperature rising, my head starts to swim
I feel like a teenager all over again

What is this feeling, never felt like this before
Can't believe this is happening, I only want more
The love of my dreams, has finally become reality
Embraced in your arms, a feeling of totality

Wow, I say to you...I love you so much
You look into my eyes, again our lips touch
"You mean the world to me", you say in a whisper
I start to feel faint, god...what have you done to me Mister.

I'm not a poet by any stretch of the imagination, just a hopeless romantic (so trite) who was dusting off the journals and clearing out the cobwebs. lol

edited to add title. This never actually had a title. I gave it a quick title just to post it, but it never seemed fitting. Today, I was inspired.

Left Field

Jul 9 2007, 04:46 PM

QUOTE(Inner Space @ Jul 9 2007, 12:42 PM)

I'm not a poet by any stretch of the imagination, just a hopeless romantic (so trite) who was dusting off the journals and clearing out the cobwebs. lol

Hey now, we're all poets, just not famous ones

I enjoyed the poem--it was sweet. Well written too.

glassvampire

Jul 10 2007, 01:11 AM

I dig it, I think it's totally dope.

And there's this...

QUOTE

Wow, I say to you...I love you so much
You look onto my eyes, again our lips touch
"You mean the world to me", you say in a whisper
I start to feel faint, my god...what have you done to me mister

But how did you know my middle name was Mister?

j/k

You are a poet!

She-ra

Jul 10 2007, 02:20 AM

Wow. I got tingly reading that. Nice work hun!!!

Inner Space

Jul 10 2007, 06:57 AM

Thank you guys.

nn23

Jul 11 2007, 02:43 PM

i LOVE it...you described the moment so beautifully, you can really sense what you are feeling, its SO romantic

LOVE YOU!
Nx

Inner Space

Jul 11 2007, 03:52 PM

QUOTE(nn23 @ Jul 11 2007, 10:43 AM)

i LOVE it...you described the moment so beautifully, you can really sense what you are feeling, its SO romantic

LOVE YOU!
Nx

.

Ahhh, shucks ma'am. I love you too.

And thank you.

greggK

Jul 16 2007, 02:08 PM

QUOTE(Inner Space @ Jul 9 2007, 10:42 AM)

Magic In The Moment

I often envision that first kiss with you
All senses run wild, my imagination does too
My heart starts to race, my face becomes flush
I find myself breathless, I feel a head Rush

Touching my face, you wipe away a tear
Slowly we draw closer with the tenderest of care
I gaze into your eyes, such passion I see
Our lips begin to meet, I'm suddenly set free

My god....I say under my breath
Such life within me now, forgotten is death
My temperature rising, my head starts to swim
I feel like a teenager all over again

What is this feeling, never felt like this before
Can't believe this is happening, I only want more
The love of my dreams, has finally become reality
Embraced in your arms, a feeling of totality

Wow, I say to you...I love you so much
You look into my eyes, again our lips touch
"You mean the world to me", you say in a whisper
I start to feel faint, god...what have you done to me Mister.
I'm not a poet by any stretch of the imagination, just a hopeless romantic (so trite) who was dusting off the journals and clearing out the cobwebs. lol
edited to add title. This never actually had a title. I gave it a quick title just to post it, but it never seemed fitting. Today, I was inspired.

Your body is the pen,

And mind is the eye that reads.

You are an inspiration.

Inner Space

Jul 16 2007, 06:51 PM

QUOTE(greggK @ Jul 16 2007, 10:08 AM)

Your body is the pen,

And mind is the eye that reads.

You are an inspiration.

Wow, that was beautiful Gregg...and thank you.

Isis2200

Jul 16 2007, 07:39 PM

Beautiful poem, Sweetie

You've definitely got a flair for writing poetry, especially if it involves romance. Ooh la la! lol

Inner Space

Jul 16 2007, 08:19 PM

QUOTE(Isis2200 @ Jul 16 2007, 03:39 PM)

You've definitely got a flair for writing poetry, especially if it involves romance. Ooh la la! lol

LOL, that made me laugh Isis, and thank you.

The poem actually has a deeper meaning, as there's symbolism in the kiss.

She-ra

Aug 14 2007, 05:27 AM

QUOTE(Inner Space @ Jul 9 2007, 12:42 PM)

Magic In The Moment

I often envision that first kiss with you
All senses run wild, my imagination does too
My heart starts to race, my face becomes flush
I find myself breathless, I feel a head Rush

Touching my face, you wipe away a tear
Slowly we draw closer with the tenderest of care
I gaze into your eyes, such passion I see
Our lips begin to meet, I'm suddenly set free

My god....I say under my breath
Such life within me now, forgotten is death
My temperature rising, my head starts to swim
I feel like a teenager all over again

What is this feeling, never felt like this before
Can't believe this is happening, I only want more
The love of my dreams, has finally become reality
Embraced in your arms, a feeling of totality

Wow, I say to you...I love you so much
You look into my eyes, again our lips touch
"You mean the world to me", you say in a whisper
I start to feel faint, god...what have you done to me Mister.

Wow. I just pulled this up searching through W/H and WOW... on this note I'm calling it a night.

Soulful, brilliant, makes me want to cry

WOW !! Thank you for sharing. Much love, Jody

swtp

Aug 14 2007, 01:26 PM

What a really great poem Inner Space! As i was reading,it took me back to a very special "Magic in the momment"! And brought back such wonderful memmories! You do have a real talent, don,t doubt that! Thank you so much for sharing it!

IzzyGone

Aug 23 2007, 12:29 AM

I agree - beautiful writing ...and I KNOW this one's yours cuz you claim it! Ha! No more goofs on my part.

Your soul is as beautiful as it feels to me thu this digital E-ther...

Inner Space

Aug 23 2007, 01:12 AM

Oh my...I'm sorry I didn't respond to your kind comments earlier Jody and Swtp...I didn't realize this had been brought back up from the dust...lol. Thank you so much...!!!

Storm, lol...yes I guess I'll have to claim this one...

...and thank you. You are such a sweetheart...but then again, you already know how I feel about cha!!

Again, many thanks to everyone...it really made me feel...well, you made me smile.

~V

Lt_Ripley

Aug 23 2007, 02:54 AM

there is something to be said about the loveliness of the anticipation of a first kiss.

LogicalPiccolo

Aug 23 2007, 10:19 AM

QUOTE(Inner Space @ Jul 9 2007, 09:42 AM)

Magic In The Moment

I often envision that first kiss with you
All senses run wild, my imagination does too
My heart starts to race, my face becomes flush
I find myself breathless, I feel a head Rush

Touching my face, you wipe away a tear
Slowly we draw closer with the tenderest of care
I gaze into your eyes, such passion I see
Our lips begin to meet, I'm suddenly set free

My god....I say under my breath
Such life within me now, forgotten is death
My temperature rising, my head starts to swim
I feel like a teenager all over again

What is this feeling, never felt like this before
Can't believe this is happening, I only want more
The love of my dreams, has finally become reality
Embraced in your arms, a feeling of totality

Wow, I say to you...I love you so much
You look into my eyes, again our lips touch
"You mean the world to me", you say in a whisper
I start to feel faint, god...what have you done to me Mister.
I'm not a poet by any stretch of the imagination, just a hopeless romantic (so trite) who was dusting off the journals and clearing out the cobwebs. lol
edited to add title. This never actually had a title. I gave it a quick title just to post it, but it never seemed fitting. Today, I was inspired.

Oh come now inner space this is awesome

First it is very contemporary. There is an awesome presence to the love and "puppy dog eye" feeling in this and I adore it.

Also, dare I say I haven't seen "private sector" poetry with such a great use of slant rhyme? I haven't read that since my last encounter with Ms. Dickinson!

Bravo! Bravo I say!

Emily Dickinson

Aug 23 2007, 12:04 PM

I agree - it's good and we are all poets and you certainly qualify if you are a romantic at heart.

Inner Space

Aug 23 2007, 01:52 PM

QUOTE(Ambriel @ Aug 23 2007, 06:19 AM)

Oh come now inner space this is awesome

First it is very contemporary. There is an awesome presence to the love and "puppy dog eye" feeling in this and I adore it.

Also, dare I say I haven't seen "private sector" poetry with such a great use of slant rhyme? I haven't read that since my last encounter with Ms. Dickinson!

Bravo! Bravo I say!

Ambriel, wow...I am really touched by your comments. First I had to look up the meaning of "slant rhyme"...lol, still don't quite get it,

but hey, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Coming from someone with such amazing talent as yourself, I feel honored.

QUOTE

there is something to be said about the loveliness of the anticipation of a first kiss.

Isn't that the truth...Lt_Ripley, I still

when I read this...lol. I was definitely caught up in the moment.

QUOTE

I agree - it's good and we are all poets and you certainly qualify if you are a romantic at heart.

Oh?, if that's all it takes to be a poet...well then...I guess I'm a shoe-in...

Thank you Cruzer, and welcome to UM.

~V

Leonardo

Aug 23 2007, 05:33 PM

Wow!!!

You project the feelings so well with your words, IS.

You have an amazing gift

Emily Dickinson

Aug 23 2007, 09:43 PM

QUOTE(Inner Space @ Aug 23 2007, 08:52 AM)

Oh?, if that's all it takes to be a poet...well then...I guess I'm a shoe-in...

Thank you Cruzer, and welcome to UM.

~V

Thanks for the welcome. Looks like nice site.