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PrettyAndCorrupt

Crucify my lover

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[ disclaimer ] While I find nothing wrong with the following poem, I have posted it on other sites and people have found it offensive. If you are one of these people..let me say beforehand..I dont care. grin2.gif

Crucify my lover, it was he who set me free.

Hang him from a cross.

He manipulated me.

Place a crown upon his head

To tell him he was my king.

A crown of thorns to scar his head

Three nails you should now bring.

Whip his back and tear his skin.

Watch the tears fall from his eyes.

Watch him die, and watch him cry

Let him fall to his demise.

Crucify my lover

He took my sins away.

It was he who saved my life this time.

And you who left me to decay.

When I was dying he picked me up

No whips, no stones, no lies.

No fear of hell, no shame in me.

No guilt, im fine this time.

So nail his hands and nail them deep

Those hands, they healed my pain.

They took my scars, and chased my fears

And left me whole again.

So nail his feet and nail them good

Those feet they carried me home.

Carried me to a safer place.

Where im not so alone.

Now leave him there to suffer a while.

His death is ever near.

For he committed the gravest crime

He took away my fears.

Crucify my lover

He saved a dying girl

From the troubles of her life

The sadness of the world.

I can never tell you how much you have

My love and my affection

And I can hardly wait

For your resurrection....

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Although this might be offensive to Christians, I think this is a great poem. thumbsup.gif

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I am a Christian and I didn't find it offensive at all. I second Phantom's opinion.

It is a good poem. original.gif

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I like it PrettyAndCorrupt.....Well done, great poem

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Thanks you guys thumbsup.gif

When I wrote the poem..

I meant no offense to Christians. I moreso wanted to relay deep feelings of love and perhaps obsession that one could feel towards Christ, to a lover.

I did write this at a time when I was very obsessed with the person I am with..luckily ive learned a few lessons on life and im over that now happy.gif Its still one of my fav.

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Hey Pretty

I do not find that offensive. That really is a good poem, I like it. original.gif

Lottie

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wow, thats a great poem! im crap at making up poems. im alright at making storys. but poems im really bad at.

once again, great poem thumbsup.gif thanks for sharing

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Excellent poem PAC thumbsup.gifthumbup.gifclap.gifbounce.gifnotworthy.gif

If your writing is found to be offensive then be proud because your poem has been noticed

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Some very nice themes there.

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Excellent poem, very powerful. well done. thumbsup.gif

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and here i was under the impression that you were a Hindu......

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A complete load of beligerent, self indulgent garbage in my opinion!

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as poems go that was truly a poem

well written

well thought out

well done thumbup.gif

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There is this X-Japan song titled : "CRUCIFY MY LOVE". Are you inspired by it ?

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