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SpiritWriter

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To your suppleness

I shall not compare myself

for my sapling root

has barely drunk

from this slightly dampened soil.

Still, I gleefully thrust

tender branches in the radiant sun.

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Defiant and enthusiastic. :)

My crown is like a lilac bush,

With a broken neck, it cranes it's head.

After months under snow,

It arches itself slowly, slowly, slowly

and becomes so much stronger.

Resplendant in the spring,

More determined in the Fall.

Doomed to happily repeat the process.

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There is a graceful orientalism found in both these pieces.

SpiritWriter, the action (verbs) is quite sparse but when it occurs it is done in a gentle manner which only serves to ironically make your piece more forceful. Well done.

LikelyGuy, a perfect companion piece. Perseverance is the dominant theme and again because it is found in what we consider fragile it gives it a sense of more power but soft power.

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I like both poems posted in this thread :)

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