Ever Learning Posted February 13, 2013 #1 Share Posted February 13, 2013 (edited) i trust her she's never given me reason to doubt as her body nears his, every fiber of my body begins to shout. she's only dancing with her friend i saw her eyes meet his, does she care about me or does she only pretend. no she said she'd walk with me a one thousand miles, then why does she lure him, with all her feminine wiles. i better stop this before it becomes some thing more, i'll dance with her and her friend, i will block his advances, show him our love is raw. she smiles at me, his warning off must of made her glad, i didnt seem too obvious, well at least shes not mad. thats right she wants me to be like this, to be her protector. Im her boyfriend, by not interfering id only neglect her. she dances with me now but why does it look forced, her friends a third wheel, because of him this tension is caused. she pushes me away and im not sure why, i was looking at him, i trust her...., just not this guy! i need to stop being jealous, i need to win her back. ill just return with some daniels and jack. the guys seizes his chance, just to spite me he smiles at me as if what he's doing isnt unsightly. im having none of this, i push my self her way. i hit him once, he doesnt know what to do. she says she cant believe me, that we are obviously through. she says i cant trust you ,you shouldnt stay, i cant believe your jealous, hes my friend and obviously gay. its over Edited February 13, 2013 by Armchair Educated 8 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Doctor Kyrie Posted February 13, 2013 #2 Share Posted February 13, 2013 This is beautiful. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ever Learning Posted February 13, 2013 Author #3 Share Posted February 13, 2013 (edited) This is beautiful. thanks, trying to portay jealousy, harder than i thought Edited February 13, 2013 by Armchair Educated 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Knight Of Shadows Posted February 13, 2013 #4 Share Posted February 13, 2013 must be really jealous to start two of those none the less .. awesome man great job 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ever Learning Posted February 13, 2013 Author #5 Share Posted February 13, 2013 (edited) must be really jealous to start two of those none the less .. awesome man great job cheers dude, check out my other one http://www.unexplain...howtopic=242842 Edited February 13, 2013 by Armchair Educated Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrimsonKing Posted February 13, 2013 #6 Share Posted February 13, 2013 Nice job catching jealousy in a bottle right there!This is one reason i never go to a bar or club with a girlfriend,my only trip to jail in my life was because i was dumb enough to do it once and wound up pulling the guy out of his friends passenger's seat window and beat the hell out of him in the parking lot haha.Though it was for good reason.The cop felt bad for taking me to jail,she bailed me out,and the judge threw the charges out!So all in all wasnt to bad just would never go that route again. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eldorado Posted February 13, 2013 #7 Share Posted February 13, 2013 You need to set that to music. Good stuff, amigo... I'm suitably impressed and jealous of your talents. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ever Learning Posted February 13, 2013 Author #8 Share Posted February 13, 2013 You need to set that to music. Good stuff, amigo... I'm suitably impressed and jealous of your talents. cheers for the feed back, makes me want to write more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ever Learning Posted February 13, 2013 Author #9 Share Posted February 13, 2013 Nice job catching jealousy in a bottle right there!This is one reason i never go to a bar or club with a girlfriend,my only trip to jail in my life was because i was dumb enough to do it once and wound up pulling the guy out of his friends passenger's seat window and beat the hell out of him in the parking lot haha.Though it was for good reason.The cop felt bad for taking me to jail,she bailed me out,and the judge threw the charges out!So all in all wasnt to bad just would never go that route again. im glad all worked out and thanks for your comment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Still Waters Posted February 13, 2013 #10 Share Posted February 13, 2013 Jealousy can show how much someone cares, but it can also destroy. That was a good poem, well done 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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