Mistydawn Posted February 15, 2013 #1 Share Posted February 15, 2013 Asteroid skims over Earths atmosphere Fat human skims teeth over beef-burger Or possibly it’s a horse-burger Conglomerates of money-makers gasp at Market Trends Children play in concrete yards Ready for home, homework and bed Dream of play and freedom Conglomerates of money-makers content at end of day Traffic builds up over the bridge, along the highway Gasoline and diesel fumes mingle “The clouds are interesting to view tonight,“ says Mabel Conglomerates of money-makers drink long into the night Hand held out begging an old man with no sight Young girl runs for all her might Swallows duck and dive, survive Conglomerates of money-makers fight to gain more might Daytime News for all who view Give weather updates and insight What you can do with money earned to brighten-up your life Conglomerates of money-makers say enough’s enough for today In restful repose men die fearful Anger frustration and dread linger The world turns on it’s axle and Conglomerates of money-makers wake to a new day 7 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Knight Of Shadows Posted February 15, 2013 #2 Share Posted February 15, 2013 that's quite covers the terriable things greed can do to humans .. or that's how i saw it but great poem none the less and amazing structure ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mistydawn Posted February 15, 2013 Author #3 Share Posted February 15, 2013 You are an extraordinary verser so I am very honoured you took time to read and comment. Thank you very much. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sean93 Posted February 15, 2013 #4 Share Posted February 15, 2013 I like your profile picture. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mistydawn Posted February 15, 2013 Author #5 Share Posted February 15, 2013 I like your profile picture. what did you think about my poem? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sean93 Posted February 15, 2013 #6 Share Posted February 15, 2013 what did you think about my poem? Apocalyptic...interadesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mistydawn Posted February 15, 2013 Author #7 Share Posted February 15, 2013 Apocalyptic...interadesting. Apocalyptic...interadesting. Thank you Sean. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Knight Of Shadows Posted February 15, 2013 #8 Share Posted February 15, 2013 You are an extraordinary verser so I am very honoured you took time to read and comment. Thank you very much. ohh please am just a guy with terriable english some people find it interesting Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mistydawn Posted February 15, 2013 Author #9 Share Posted February 15, 2013 ohh please am just a guy with terriable english some people find it interesting ohh please am just a guy with terriable english some people find it interesting Terrilble English my posterior! You poems are brilliant, end of. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theSOURCE Posted February 16, 2013 #10 Share Posted February 16, 2013 Good one Misty. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SHaYap Posted February 16, 2013 #11 Share Posted February 16, 2013 hmmm.... I am swimming in familiar waters ... to drown in the pockets of the rich ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mistydawn Posted February 16, 2013 Author #12 Share Posted February 16, 2013 third_eye and Source, thank you both so much for reading and for your comments. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arcana Posted February 17, 2013 #13 Share Posted February 17, 2013 Love it Misty, a very different avenue explored with your great creativity and it resonates with me deeply. Thank you for sharing your talent and your heart. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
schizoidwoman Posted February 17, 2013 #14 Share Posted February 17, 2013 Very evocative and powerful, MD, brilliant! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Still Waters Posted February 18, 2013 #15 Share Posted February 18, 2013 This is a good poem. I've read it a few times now and each time it makes me think of the start to a movie. You know where they show different scenes of people going about their daily lives unaware of anything else happening in the world - well that's how it comes across when I'm reading it. I like it, well done Misty 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cloudshill Posted February 23, 2013 #16 Share Posted February 23, 2013 Well done Miss T.........as usual Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mistydawn Posted February 25, 2013 Author #17 Share Posted February 25, 2013 Thank you so much Arc, Schizy, Stilly and Cloudsy...four of my favourite peeps! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Enoonmai Posted February 25, 2013 #18 Share Posted February 25, 2013 nice you been reading bukowski Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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