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Odd Requiem

London Bridge

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Because insomnia is the way I roll, I figured what better way to spend my time than lurk on UM...slowly becoming my online getaway.

London Bridge Is

where i dreamed i met you

where i fell in love with you

before we started

Falling

down the endless spiral

thinking in circles

living in circles

Down

into darkness

into pain

into hate

Falling

endlessly speeding up

ripping each other apart

tearing each other

Down

destroying the ground beneath our feet

until we start

Falling

digging our nails painfully into each other

trying to stop falling

Down

is it us or reality

if we open our eyes will we finally see

London Bridge Is

the only thing that isn't

Falling Down

i wish you were

My

even though you aren't

Fair

you ******** ******

Lady

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Love the way you incorporated a children's rhyme into this poem, yes, I read it twice, first straightforward then just the words capitalized.

London Bridge is the only thing that isn't Falling Down...is a brilliant line.

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A frenzied mind is a creative one at times. Thank you :)

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So many poems and so little time.

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very well done.. simply brilliant

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Nicely done... :tu:

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What a clever poem you came up with, Odd. I liked it...alot. ^_^

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Great poem Odd. You really just blew my mind and inspired me, and for something to touch me that deeply is somewhat of a feat. Being a poet myself I'm very critical, and most of the time can't really feel the pain of others, because I'm too busy feeling my own pain, and releasing it upon the world through the ink in my pen, or letters on my keyboard. You are a great mind Odd, dark and cracked with a heart of glass that forever spills your blood overflowing with life, love, smiles and hurt. You just gave me hope for another day buddy thank you. :blush:

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Very clever :tu:

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Had to read this yet again after TNO was inspired by this specific piece to write his The Big Bad Wolf piece.

Love can have it's harsh phases and ends and even the original children's rhyme has dark theories for its origins.

Really like that it is inspired by a nursery rhyme, sing-song-rhymey by nature but this piece does not rhyme at all, another excellent twist. The beginning is the best but having everything spiral down and out of control adds a sense of authenticity, just like the original London Bridge Is Falling Down.

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