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She cried.

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I couldn't think of a much better title <_< oh well...

She bites her nails

She chews her lip,

Her eyes well up

But no tears drip.

She tells herself

Don't let it show,

Hold it in.

Don't let it go.

Then just as she knows

She can't hold much more,

They're in the driveway,

Then through the door.

And in her room

She breaths a sigh,

Sits on her bed,

And begins to cry.

She cries for love

And blissful fear,

For though her life

Has been short here,

The weight of the world

Which bends and breaks,

Binds her lungs with every breath she takes.

One pill goes down,

Then two, then four,

'Till she just can't feel the pain anymore.

And although one day

This girl will die,

Just for one moment

This girl will fly.

Yet the tears still flow,

Each one down.

As soon she is silent,

Making no sound.

And with a smile she slips away,

to some unknown place,

As her last, single, bitter tear

Slips silently down her face.

Sorry for the grammatical incorrectness and errors :geek:

Edited by FinnYellow
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I won't fault you for romanticizing suicide but instead celebrate the fact that you are a slave to creativity.

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Well done!

Poignant.

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It's sad, yet touching. One who writes well will never die....

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Posted (edited)

I won't fault you for romanticizing suicide but instead celebrate the fact that you are a slave to creativity.

Thank you ^_^ and thanks for reading it!

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Well done!

Poignant.

Thank you QC, and thanks for reading it as well. ^_^

Edited by FinnYellow

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It's sad, yet touching. One who writes well will never die....

Thanks Cloudshill, very wise and truthful words indeed. Thanks for reading ^_^

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Very good poem.

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Very good poem.

Thank you very much Still Waters ^_^

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I love it.

You capture emotion very well, so that the reader can feel it as well.

Bravo! :tu:

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I love it.

You capture emotion very well, so that the reader can feel it as well.

Bravo! :tu:

Thanks muchly AliveInDeath7, and thanks for reading ^_^ i'm glad you liked it :)

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