Yona Posted June 6, 2006 #1 Share Posted June 6, 2006 Well, I looked, and I decided a Tanka Topic would be fun to start. Basically it is a haiku, but with 5,7,2,7,7 syllables instead of 5,7,5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrankBlunt Posted June 6, 2006 #2 Share Posted June 6, 2006 Summer has arrived Time for ice cream and sunburns Cool down Belly flop into a pool Cannon ball to drench your friends Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 7, 2006 #3 Share Posted June 7, 2006 Let's see if I can remember the sequence: 5,7,2,7,7.... Twenty white chickens They wander my yard, seeking Earthworms Eating, clucking, and pecking Mobile lawn decorations Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrankBlunt Posted June 7, 2006 #4 Share Posted June 7, 2006 Anxious for the game Loitering in parking lots Drinking Marbles lost, babbling nonsense Athletes falling from armchairs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 8, 2006 #5 Share Posted June 8, 2006 (edited) Night dies, stars wink out Each one yeilding to the dawn Light blooms A purple flower turns to gold All herald the waking sun Edited June 8, 2006 by Maelstrom5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ABOTU Posted June 8, 2006 #6 Share Posted June 8, 2006 What a shameless world. With no apologies, we Don't care. Someday we will live in peace. And love will reign over us. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 9, 2006 #7 Share Posted June 9, 2006 (edited) Sand trickling in glass time slipped slowly by today Sorrow For those days I can't retrieve And yet another fades away Edited June 9, 2006 by Maelstrom5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrankBlunt Posted June 11, 2006 #8 Share Posted June 11, 2006 Reincarnation Why we fall asleep in school Cycles Doomed to repeat history Whether remembered or not Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jack_of_Blades Posted June 12, 2006 #9 Share Posted June 12, 2006 Three stupid seagulls flew in my car last weekend. Seagulls have to be stupid or blind. Had fried seagull the next day! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearly Posted June 12, 2006 #10 Share Posted June 12, 2006 (edited) soft sigh of regret sweet chance lost, and sparks that dimmed a lass the dream gone, her smile remains treasured diamond in the sand Edited June 12, 2006 by Bearly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jack_of_Blades Posted June 12, 2006 #11 Share Posted June 12, 2006 (edited) The lovely redhead who i dare not pronounce love. True love. I shall never again love another woman but her. I had a little insperation from the heart for this one. Edited June 12, 2006 by Jack_of_Blades Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 14, 2006 #12 Share Posted June 14, 2006 soft sigh of regret sweet chance lost, and sparks that dimmed a lass the dream gone, her smile remains treasured diamond in the sand Very nice! Beautifully done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 14, 2006 #13 Share Posted June 14, 2006 So then the rains came The iron grey sky, it weeps Torrents Water trails down window glass Hurricane season is here Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearly Posted June 14, 2006 #14 Share Posted June 14, 2006 (edited) Very nice! Beautifully done Thanks so much Maelstrom. Your first post on this site about regreting days passing by inspired me. I like the one above also. Edited June 15, 2006 by Bearly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearly Posted June 15, 2006 #15 Share Posted June 15, 2006 (edited) huddled by the fire ashes of her lonely world approached warm silk brushing tired legs rhythmic purring, neither spoke (dedicated to my cat Leo that passed away many years ago) Edited June 15, 2006 by Bearly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearly Posted June 16, 2006 #16 Share Posted June 16, 2006 (edited) I have done some online research on Tanka, and it appears that the standard syllable arrangement is actually 5,7,5,7,7 and not 5,7,2,7,7. In fact, I could find no reference to a 5,7,2,7,7 arrangement. But, ultimately is doesn't matter, as most American Tanka's organizations recognize that the syllables in Japanese and English language differ. And considering the nice poems on this thread, this 5, 7,2, format works very well. Maybe we need to make up a new name for it Perhaps Yona found this format elsewhere? Besides, it's his thread, so he can set the rules. Edited June 16, 2006 by Bearly 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 16, 2006 #17 Share Posted June 16, 2006 huddled by the fire ashes of her lonely world approached warm silk brushing tired legs rhythmic purring, neither spoke (dedicated to my cat Leo that passed away many years ago) How sweet! I love cats, so I can definitely identify with this. Well done! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 16, 2006 #18 Share Posted June 16, 2006 I have done some online research on Tanka, and it appears that the standard syllable arrangement is actually 5,7,5,7,7 and not 5,7,2,7,7. In fact, I could find no reference to a 5,7,2,7,7 arrangement. But, ultimately is doesn't matter, as most American Tanka's organizations recognize that the syllables in Japanese and English language differ. And considering the nice poems on this thread, this 5, 7,2, format works very well. Maybe we need to make up a new name for it Perhaps Yona found this format elsewhere? Besides, it's his thread, so he can set the rules. Interesting... Good point. You know, for some reason I do like the two-syllable 'pause' in the dead center of the poem, the use of a single word or pair of words there is a nice touch when reading the final product. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearly Posted June 16, 2006 #19 Share Posted June 16, 2006 Interesting... Good point. You know, for some reason I do like the two-syllable 'pause' in the dead center of the poem, the use of a single word or pair of words there is a nice touch when reading the final product. Thanks Maelstrom5 for the compliments. It's flattering that someone is enjoying my poems, as they do take some effort. I like the one you did about the sunrise also. And I agree. The pause in the dead center is almost like a pivot point. It can also be used as a spot for contemplation, a change in pace, a contecting idea or a theme statement. This link discusses the differences between english syllables and 'morae'. Morae is what the japanese are counting. This link explains that the word london would count as two syllables, but the Japanese would count four 'morae' in this word. The japanese count morae, while the Westerners count syllables. http://www.worldhaiku.net/archive/onji.pdf. Here's another link on tanka that people might find interesting. http://www.ahapoetry.com/tanka.htm 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 16, 2006 #20 Share Posted June 16, 2006 This link discusses the differences between english syllables and 'morae'. Morae is what the japanese are counting. This link explains that the word london would count as two syllables, but the Japanese would count four 'morae' in this word. The japanese count morae, while the Westerners count syllables. http://www.worldhaiku.net/archive/onji.pdf. Here's another link on tanka that people might find interesting. http://www.ahapoetry.com/tanka.htm Thanks for the links, quite a neat subject this has become! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearly Posted June 17, 2006 #21 Share Posted June 17, 2006 (edited) Mountains of coral some hidden beneath the waves atoll that sand dollars could not pay salty tears raising the sea The title is 'Shipwreck' hint, hint Edited June 18, 2006 by Bearly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 18, 2006 #22 Share Posted June 18, 2006 (edited) Pause for reflection Mirrors, water, blackened glass They lie Backwards worlds, seen in reverse Slip through, drown in vanity Edited June 18, 2006 by Maelstrom5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearly Posted June 19, 2006 #23 Share Posted June 19, 2006 (edited) Pause for reflection Mirrors, water, blackened glass They lie Backwards worlds, seen in reverse Slip through, drown in vanity I like this one a lot Jillian. Well done. I like poems that makes one think, and ones that use multiple meanings of words Edited June 19, 2006 by Bearly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maelstrom5 Posted June 21, 2006 #24 Share Posted June 21, 2006 I like poems that makes one think, and ones that use multiple meanings of words Tanks, umm, I mean, Thanks! (Tanka on the brain) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearly Posted June 30, 2006 #25 Share Posted June 30, 2006 Tanks, umm, I mean, Thanks! (Tanka on the brain) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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