PrettyAndCorrupt 0 #1 Posted February 25, 2004 [ disclaimer ] While I find nothing wrong with the following poem, I have posted it on other sites and people have found it offensive. If you are one of these people..let me say beforehand..I dont care. Crucify my lover, it was he who set me free. Hang him from a cross. He manipulated me. Place a crown upon his head To tell him he was my king. A crown of thorns to scar his head Three nails you should now bring. Whip his back and tear his skin. Watch the tears fall from his eyes. Watch him die, and watch him cry Let him fall to his demise. Crucify my lover He took my sins away. It was he who saved my life this time. And you who left me to decay. When I was dying he picked me up No whips, no stones, no lies. No fear of hell, no shame in me. No guilt, im fine this time. So nail his hands and nail them deep Those hands, they healed my pain. They took my scars, and chased my fears And left me whole again. So nail his feet and nail them good Those feet they carried me home. Carried me to a safer place. Where im not so alone. Now leave him there to suffer a while. His death is ever near. For he committed the gravest crime He took away my fears. Crucify my lover He saved a dying girl From the troubles of her life The sadness of the world. I can never tell you how much you have My love and my affection And I can hardly wait For your resurrection.... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Phantom 6 #2 Posted February 25, 2004 Although this might be offensive to Christians, I think this is a great poem. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
joc 7,516 #3 Posted February 25, 2004 I am a Christian and I didn't find it offensive at all. I second Phantom's opinion. It is a good poem. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Thistle 2 #4 Posted February 25, 2004 I like it PrettyAndCorrupt.....Well done, great poem Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
PrettyAndCorrupt 0 #5 Posted February 25, 2004 Thanks you guys When I wrote the poem.. I meant no offense to Christians. I moreso wanted to relay deep feelings of love and perhaps obsession that one could feel towards Christ, to a lover. I did write this at a time when I was very obsessed with the person I am with..luckily ive learned a few lessons on life and im over that now Its still one of my fav. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lottie 7 #6 Posted February 25, 2004 Hey Pretty I do not find that offensive. That really is a good poem, I like it. Lottie Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
zygon 0 #7 Posted February 26, 2004 wow, thats a great poem! im crap at making up poems. im alright at making storys. but poems im really bad at. once again, great poem thanks for sharing Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
doomgirl 3 #8 Posted March 2, 2004 Excellent poem PAC If your writing is found to be offensive then be proud because your poem has been noticed Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
WorkMonkey 0 #9 Posted March 20, 2004 Some very nice themes there. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Gerry 0 #10 Posted March 21, 2004 Excellent poem, very powerful. well done. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
man_in_mudboots 2 #11 Posted April 10, 2004 and here i was under the impression that you were a Hindu...... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Boddhi 0 #12 Posted April 10, 2004 A complete load of beligerent, self indulgent garbage in my opinion! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mickyboy 0 #13 Posted April 19, 2004 as poems go that was truly a poem well written well thought out well done Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
greychupa 1 #14 Posted April 19, 2004 There is this X-Japan song titled : "CRUCIFY MY LOVE". Are you inspired by it ? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
