PrettyAndCorrupt Posted February 25, 2004 #1 Share Posted February 25, 2004 [ disclaimer ] While I find nothing wrong with the following poem, I have posted it on other sites and people have found it offensive. If you are one of these people..let me say beforehand..I dont care. Crucify my lover, it was he who set me free. Hang him from a cross. He manipulated me. Place a crown upon his head To tell him he was my king. A crown of thorns to scar his head Three nails you should now bring. Whip his back and tear his skin. Watch the tears fall from his eyes. Watch him die, and watch him cry Let him fall to his demise. Crucify my lover He took my sins away. It was he who saved my life this time. And you who left me to decay. When I was dying he picked me up No whips, no stones, no lies. No fear of hell, no shame in me. No guilt, im fine this time. So nail his hands and nail them deep Those hands, they healed my pain. They took my scars, and chased my fears And left me whole again. So nail his feet and nail them good Those feet they carried me home. Carried me to a safer place. Where im not so alone. Now leave him there to suffer a while. His death is ever near. For he committed the gravest crime He took away my fears. Crucify my lover He saved a dying girl From the troubles of her life The sadness of the world. I can never tell you how much you have My love and my affection And I can hardly wait For your resurrection.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted February 25, 2004 #2 Share Posted February 25, 2004 Although this might be offensive to Christians, I think this is a great poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
+joc Posted February 25, 2004 #3 Share Posted February 25, 2004 I am a Christian and I didn't find it offensive at all. I second Phantom's opinion. It is a good poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thistle Posted February 25, 2004 #4 Share Posted February 25, 2004 I like it PrettyAndCorrupt.....Well done, great poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PrettyAndCorrupt Posted February 25, 2004 Author #5 Share Posted February 25, 2004 Thanks you guys When I wrote the poem.. I meant no offense to Christians. I moreso wanted to relay deep feelings of love and perhaps obsession that one could feel towards Christ, to a lover. I did write this at a time when I was very obsessed with the person I am with..luckily ive learned a few lessons on life and im over that now Its still one of my fav. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Lottie Posted February 25, 2004 #6 Share Posted February 25, 2004 Hey Pretty I do not find that offensive. That really is a good poem, I like it. Lottie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zygon Posted February 26, 2004 #7 Share Posted February 26, 2004 wow, thats a great poem! im crap at making up poems. im alright at making storys. but poems im really bad at. once again, great poem thanks for sharing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
doomgirl Posted March 2, 2004 #8 Share Posted March 2, 2004 Excellent poem PAC If your writing is found to be offensive then be proud because your poem has been noticed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WorkMonkey Posted March 20, 2004 #9 Share Posted March 20, 2004 Some very nice themes there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gerry Posted March 21, 2004 #10 Share Posted March 21, 2004 Excellent poem, very powerful. well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
man_in_mudboots Posted April 10, 2004 #11 Share Posted April 10, 2004 and here i was under the impression that you were a Hindu...... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boddhi Posted April 10, 2004 #12 Share Posted April 10, 2004 A complete load of beligerent, self indulgent garbage in my opinion! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mickyboy Posted April 19, 2004 #13 Share Posted April 19, 2004 as poems go that was truly a poem well written well thought out well done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
greychupa Posted April 19, 2004 #14 Share Posted April 19, 2004 There is this X-Japan song titled : "CRUCIFY MY LOVE". Are you inspired by it ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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