Starlyte 4 #1 Posted May 17, 2004 Fear Quietly and slowly I walk inside, Desperately wanting to hide my eyes, From what is waiting just for me, I feel the stare, I sense the fear, And I am brought down to my knees. Oh silent fear you've followed me here, To play with my mind just one last time. To make me crazy and ashamed, Have I really not felt enough pain? Being tortured will not be my claim to fame. Hear his slow deliberate steps, Making the wait more torturous, Just go ahead and get it over with! For I can't take it anymore. Just keep in mind, this one last time, I might try to even the score. Hear me now my secret fear, You are no longer welcome here, I've had enough; so ends your reign, Inside my mind you'll cause no more pain. And I will be released from the shame. So as fear faded from my sight, The last thing I saw were his piercing eyes. A vision that always reminded me, Of the frightened girl I used to be, I am now free of the fear that once did torture me. (I did edit one line for language. I didn't think the "f" word would be appropriate to use on this forum.) I also think this is better read aloud. Let me know what you think! Starlyte Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tess 0 #2 Posted May 18, 2004 WOW...........I really like that. and,i can also relate to it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Daughter of the Nine Moons 10,499 #3 Posted May 18, 2004 (edited) Hear me now my secret fear, You are no longer welcome here, I've had enough; so ends your reign, Inside my mind you'll cause no more pain. And I will be released from the shame. So as fear faded from my sight, The last thing I saw were his piercing eyes. A vision that always reminded me, Of the frightened girl I used to be, I am now free of the fear that once did torture me. Excellant! The last 2 stanzas are my favourite. Dot9M Edited May 18, 2004 by Daughter of the Nine Moons Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Starlyte 4 #4 Posted May 18, 2004 Thank you both for you kind words, and for taking the time to read my poem. Starlyte Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Boddhi 0 #5 Posted May 18, 2004 Conjours up all sorts of questions so it must be good. Whats it about? Why is she walking into the room? Why does he follow her in? What's he doing that makes her so scared? Good Stuff. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Starlyte 4 #6 Posted May 18, 2004 Thank you Boddhi! Starlyte Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
