Beastly Decimal Posted January 19, 2013 #1 Share Posted January 19, 2013 When Distractions Die Lost within the day My mind can find some peace In this constant noise My mind can find relief But when distractions die My mind recalls the grief In the silent shadow Lurks the monstrous beast Hiding from the truth here Amongst these pointless tasks Monotony my shepherd Innocence my mask But life is catching up now Catching up so fast This lovely and distracted Sleep cannot last I long to escape here Into my own flesh To hide from these monsters And hide from this mess Avert my own eyes And hold my own breath Become these distractions And forget the rest To merge with this image Escape from this truth Enter eternal sleep Enter eternal youth But I cannot leave No, I cannot fly There will come a time When distractions will die When life will be revealed For better or for worse And we shall behold This, our dark curse And there shall be nothing For us, left to say Distractions will die How I dread the day. 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raven_Tear Posted January 19, 2013 #2 Share Posted January 19, 2013 Nicely written, I can certainly relate. Well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mistydawn Posted January 19, 2013 #3 Share Posted January 19, 2013 Love the line "This lovely and distracted sleep cannot last. " Well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clarakore Posted January 19, 2013 #4 Share Posted January 19, 2013 I enjoyed the structure of 8 lines. The very center of this piece is my favorite: To hide from these monstersAnd hide from this mess Avert my own eyes And hold my own breath It is as if the whole poem hinges on this and the title of "When Distractions Die" is something that conjures up horror for me: anything to keep going, to keep focused on some task, until you are so tired you just fall asleep, because being left alone with yourself is just too horrible. I also liked the use of repitition here. It took me to a fantastical court where the royal herald is announcing the visitors that are entering the palace. Enter eternal sleepEnter eternal youth Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beastly Decimal Posted January 19, 2013 Author #5 Share Posted January 19, 2013 Thank you all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor T Posted January 19, 2013 #6 Share Posted January 19, 2013 Brilliantly written and poinient. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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