Ultima Weapon Posted February 5, 2013 #1 Share Posted February 5, 2013 I am hated for my love. I love those who hate me, No, I envy them. Should I envy nothingness? Death? Hell? It brings me peace in my dreams, Yes, I envy them. Should I only hold passion? Green? Red? My love is that of fire, No, it sets nothing ablaze. Should I strike a match with no wood? Nothing? Nobody? No one will accept my fire, Yes, it sets the forest ablaze. My love is red like the fire, And in only seeing green, Stretches out to take it, Burning the forest to the ground. No one accepts my love, they hate it. No matter how much I love them, No matter how much I envelope them with it, I am hated for my love. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SpiritWriter Posted February 5, 2013 #2 Share Posted February 5, 2013 I love this. It feels spontaneous like the colors just came to you as you contemplated this. I like how it went from striking a piece of wood to burning down a whole forest... and how the colors you contemplated before emerged as actual things of meaning, red = fire and green = trees. I feel the deep despair and the clinging to love no matter what in this piece. It is unknown at the ending if you are speaking of your own love or of gods love, but that doesn't matter because we know they are one in the same... thanks for being bold friend 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ultima Weapon Posted February 5, 2013 Author #3 Share Posted February 5, 2013 I love this. It feels spontaneous like the colors just came to you as you contemplated this. I like how it went from striking a piece of wood to burning down a whole forest... and how the colors you contemplated before emerged as actual things of meaning, red = fire and green = trees. I feel the deep despair and the clinging to love no matter what in this piece. It is unknown at the ending if you are speaking of your own love or of gods love, but that doesn't matter because we know they are one in the same... thanks for being bold friend Thanks for the kind response. I'm not really used to writing poetry, I generally just draw. Nice to know I'm apparently not as horrible at it as I think... Hopefully... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SpiritWriter Posted February 5, 2013 #4 Share Posted February 5, 2013 Have you posted any of your drawings yet? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ultima Weapon Posted February 5, 2013 Author #5 Share Posted February 5, 2013 Have you posted any of your drawings yet? Don't make me do that too... 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theSOURCE Posted February 5, 2013 #6 Share Posted February 5, 2013 Very nice AC. At first, the symbolism comes across as overly conspicuous, but after a couple more readings I find that, intentional or not, there can be a multitude of hidden meanings to many of the lines. I like poetry that allows the reader to interpret the words in their own way. Kudos! 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clarakore Posted February 12, 2013 #7 Share Posted February 12, 2013 I just decided that I had failed to fit in with a group that I've admired for years and to finally accept it and move on. Then I read this... Love the analysis by SW and tS but I took it at face value on first read and could relate. Now let me reread to see what else there is..nice work again Aquila. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clarakore Posted February 12, 2013 #8 Share Posted February 12, 2013 I can see a flame form with arms attempting to hug a tree. I love trees. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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