Odd Requiem Posted March 1, 2013 #1 Share Posted March 1, 2013 Because insomnia is the way I roll, I figured what better way to spend my time than lurk on UM...slowly becoming my online getaway. London Bridge Is where i dreamed i met you where i fell in love with you before we started Falling down the endless spiral thinking in circles living in circles Down into darkness into pain into hate Falling endlessly speeding up ripping each other apart tearing each other Down destroying the ground beneath our feet until we start Falling digging our nails painfully into each other trying to stop falling Down is it us or reality if we open our eyes will we finally see London Bridge Is the only thing that isn't Falling Down i wish you were My even though you aren't Fair you ******** ****** Lady 6 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clarakore Posted March 1, 2013 #2 Share Posted March 1, 2013 Love the way you incorporated a children's rhyme into this poem, yes, I read it twice, first straightforward then just the words capitalized. London Bridge is the only thing that isn't Falling Down...is a brilliant line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Odd Requiem Posted March 1, 2013 Author #3 Share Posted March 1, 2013 A frenzied mind is a creative one at times. Thank you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank Merton Posted March 1, 2013 #4 Share Posted March 1, 2013 So many poems and so little time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Overdueleaf Posted March 2, 2013 #5 Share Posted March 2, 2013 very well done.. simply brilliant Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cloudshill Posted March 2, 2013 #6 Share Posted March 2, 2013 Nicely done... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Indiogene Posted March 3, 2013 #7 Share Posted March 3, 2013 What a clever poem you came up with, Odd. I liked it...alot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nameless One Posted June 13, 2013 #8 Share Posted June 13, 2013 Great poem Odd. You really just blew my mind and inspired me, and for something to touch me that deeply is somewhat of a feat. Being a poet myself I'm very critical, and most of the time can't really feel the pain of others, because I'm too busy feeling my own pain, and releasing it upon the world through the ink in my pen, or letters on my keyboard. You are a great mind Odd, dark and cracked with a heart of glass that forever spills your blood overflowing with life, love, smiles and hurt. You just gave me hope for another day buddy thank you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Still Waters Posted June 15, 2013 #9 Share Posted June 15, 2013 Very clever Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clarakore Posted June 15, 2013 #10 Share Posted June 15, 2013 Had to read this yet again after TNO was inspired by this specific piece to write his The Big Bad Wolf piece. Love can have it's harsh phases and ends and even the original children's rhyme has dark theories for its origins. Really like that it is inspired by a nursery rhyme, sing-song-rhymey by nature but this piece does not rhyme at all, another excellent twist. The beginning is the best but having everything spiral down and out of control adds a sense of authenticity, just like the original London Bridge Is Falling Down. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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