BNDGK Posted April 18, 2013 #1 Share Posted April 18, 2013 (edited) I couldn't think of a much better title oh well... She bites her nails She chews her lip, Her eyes well up But no tears drip. She tells herself Don't let it show, Hold it in. Don't let it go. Then just as she knows She can't hold much more, They're in the driveway, Then through the door. And in her room She breaths a sigh, Sits on her bed, And begins to cry. She cries for love And blissful fear, For though her life Has been short here, The weight of the world Which bends and breaks, Binds her lungs with every breath she takes. One pill goes down, Then two, then four, 'Till she just can't feel the pain anymore. And although one day This girl will die, Just for one moment This girl will fly. Yet the tears still flow, Each one down. As soon she is silent, Making no sound. And with a smile she slips away, to some unknown place, As her last, single, bitter tear Slips silently down her face. Sorry for the grammatical incorrectness and errors Edited April 18, 2013 by FinnYellow 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clarakore Posted April 18, 2013 #2 Share Posted April 18, 2013 I won't fault you for romanticizing suicide but instead celebrate the fact that you are a slave to creativity. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Q-C Posted April 18, 2013 #3 Share Posted April 18, 2013 Well done! Poignant. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cloudshill Posted April 18, 2013 #4 Share Posted April 18, 2013 It's sad, yet touching. One who writes well will never die.... 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BNDGK Posted April 18, 2013 Author #5 Share Posted April 18, 2013 (edited) I won't fault you for romanticizing suicide but instead celebrate the fact that you are a slave to creativity. Thank you and thanks for reading it! Edited April 18, 2013 by FinnYellow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BNDGK Posted April 18, 2013 Author #6 Share Posted April 18, 2013 (edited) Well done! Poignant. Thank you QC, and thanks for reading it as well. Edited April 18, 2013 by FinnYellow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BNDGK Posted April 18, 2013 Author #7 Share Posted April 18, 2013 It's sad, yet touching. One who writes well will never die.... Thanks Cloudshill, very wise and truthful words indeed. Thanks for reading Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Still Waters Posted April 24, 2013 #8 Share Posted April 24, 2013 Very good poem. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BNDGK Posted April 24, 2013 Author #9 Share Posted April 24, 2013 Very good poem. Thank you very much Still Waters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xYlvax Posted April 25, 2013 #10 Share Posted April 25, 2013 I love it. You capture emotion very well, so that the reader can feel it as well. Bravo! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BNDGK Posted April 25, 2013 Author #11 Share Posted April 25, 2013 I love it. You capture emotion very well, so that the reader can feel it as well. Bravo! Thanks muchly AliveInDeath7, and thanks for reading i'm glad you liked it 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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