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{un}holy haiku - 3rd Edition

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The Wistman

award goes to the...

puissant, lumbering back

into the laurels

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Helen of Annoy

into the laurels 

memento mori - can you

hear them whisper still     

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Blue Star

award goes to the...

winter.... imoblc brings promise

which seeds will we sew?

 

Oh, my....missed a page...

 

hear them whisper still

'The Embassadors' oh vane,

vanitas, Holbeins.

https://images.app.goo.gl/kucp3AM2ebA49zWu7  

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The Wistman

*  It's a supreme masterpiece.  One of my favorite paintings. :tsu:

 

vanitas, Holbein's

sharp eye, death incised inside

suavity, beauty

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Blue Star

suavity, beauty

contrast amplified light and dark

juxtaposed clarity

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joc

juxtaposed clarity

is clarity juxtaposed

or something like that

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The Wistman

or something like that

will guarantee success, or

maybe give you warts

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Helen of Annoy

maybe give you warts

since only a prince can be

turned into a frog      

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The Wistman

turned into a frog

and live in Poitiers  - oh,

that's not what you meant

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Helen of Annoy

that's not what you meant

but where there's a will there's way

sometimes through the wall 

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The Wistman

sometimes through the wall

come sounds of night, a howling

of wind or canine

 

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Helen of Annoy

of wind or canine

naming the same yearning with 

their own mother's tongue    

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The Wistman

their own mother's tongue

steeped in nuances pecu-

liar to their breath

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Blue Star

liar to their breath

micro expressions reveal

body language tells

 

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The Wistman

body language tells

secrets - cat is eyeing me

have I said too much

 

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Blue Star

have i said too much?

with or without words, we read,

all is there to see

 

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The Wistman

all is there to see

though the programs shutter sight

from the pond's mornings

 

 

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Helen of Annoy

from the pond's mornings 

to the night that comes from woods'

sheltering darkness 

 

 

(Or should it be woods's? 'scuse me, I'm a foreigner :D 

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The Wistman

*  Ooooh, grammar puzzles!   Possessive plurals ending in 's', according to Stunk and White (whose usage I follow), require only an apostrophe.  If we take 'woods' as plural of 'wood' such would apply.  But that isn't right.  It is common to use both 'wood' and 'woods' as a form, singular, of 'forest.'  Singular plurals ending in 's' would require an additional 's' following the apostrophe.  That would give us woods's...which sounds a little clumsy but is also correct.   However, not all grammarians agree with Strunk and White, especially here in America, and would simply use woods' and have done with it. :yes:  Don't you just love English, Helen.

In this context, rereading your haiku, the single apostrophe sounds best to me, violating S&W, but what the hell.

 

 

sheltering darkness

refuge from electro darts

being hurled about

 

 

 

 

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Blue Star

I may be a local, (English) but i think the first woods' is correct but what would i know. :whistle:

I find the use of s's' to be like saying, woodses..... Which is obviously incorrect.

I use wood to mean a piece of wood as in timber, singular or not, or for a singular smallish size wood of trees.

A woods, to mean a collection of woods. 

And a woods' to be a small forest.....Indeed, the English language, though mostly a bastardization of every other languages is indeed a fascination.

 

being hurled about

unseen but still affecting

moods, feeling and thought

 

 

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Helen of Annoy

I absolutely love English. The only trouble is that the more I learn, the more aware I am just how little I know. It feels much better when you're a total beginner and so proud of each mangled sentence you somehow manage to produce :D 

Thank you both :wub:

 

moods, feeling and thought    

water rushing to find peace 

in a quiet pond   

 

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The Wistman

*  A pedantry.  Here's Yeats:

                    I went out to the hazel wood

                    Because a fire was in my head

It's a little old fashioned, but wood and woods can be interchanged.  

I agree, usable timber is wood weather singular or plural.

The issue isn't as difficult with other words that don't possess such ambiguity in singularity/plurality.   :rofl:

 

in a quiet pond

I found your message floating

in the reflections

 

 

 

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Ozymandias

When creating poetry you can throw out the rule books on usage and grammar. 

in the reflections

knowledge and experience

make the thought anew

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Helen of Annoy

@Ozymandias ! Where have you been? And thank you too for the advice :) 

 

By the way, that was exactly what confused me - how do natural speakers feel the word 'woods' - does it sound like singular or plural? Mystery solved, it's a bit of both and mostly in between :D 

 

make the thought anew

some mistakes were meant to be 

a cherry on top 

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Ozymandias

Hi, Helen. Still haikuing in your own {un}holy and inimitable way. :)

 

a cherry on top 

gracing a glaze of icing

bitten ruby red

 

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